This is my first BL story. I really love it if you guys could read ch 1 and 2 and tell me whether you love it or hate it , either way is fine , I don't have anyone to ask for their opinions and I don't know if its any good and if there is something I can improve?
https://www.wattpad.com/367844043-a-lovely-and-yet-painful-encounter-chapter-1-~
I'll make sure to check it out once I get the time :)
Ill Check it out when i have free time (づ￣ ³￣)づ
I read the first two chapters and it's a really good story (๑•ㅂ•)و✧
I think I got confused for a sec there cuz were there two girls Maria and Sabrina or just one?? Maybe I'm sleepy lol
Oh and the part before his father called got me confused as well by I think it's because I'm not that bright
I liked it an am following it :)
Oh gosh you are totally right I fixed it , it's supposed to be sabrina I fixed it now omg! and thank you very very much! I'll keep writing and I hope you keep writing feedback on what you like to see, or what you didn't like or did like, and if there is something I need to change , again really thank you (I seriously have a big smile on my face you made my day!)
Ahaha no probs~ it's just that I haven't had time to read lately (I'm becoming lazier xD)
Oh, you're doing a wonderful job and if I feel like saying something I'll be in the comments other wise if I don't post anything, rest assured that I liked it very much and am at loss for words :)
Keep up the hard work and I hope you gets lots of readers who love your works :)
Have a lovely day (≧∀≦)
So Im trying to write a BL story and I basically know what the story is going to be
basically uke has a trauma - and seme is rich they both don't trust people with different reasons but seme fell in love with this shy ass uke (even though shy he has a backbone) ..pretty cliche and basic right?
the thing is I have multiple plot lines in my mind of how they meet and how the seme is gonna find out about the uke's past ,and how they both suit eachothe. its gonna be slow paced on the smut. usually in manga trauma's are fixed with instant sex which im going to avoid in this case and Im trying to make it realistic as possible (still its gonna be fantasy)
what more should I avoid while writing this story?
hope you BL fans can give me some tips
the seme being rich are you going to make him a little meanish? or popular...etc cause although that is cliche it is popular. So you could go the other way and make the seme nice. But its your decision. :D
actually while writing this story I wanted him to be a playboy and that it self is a cliche but his inner monologue so to speak is saying " i act like a spoiled rich brat because that's what people expect from someone with a silverspoon people want my status and money " and then upon falling in love he is actually being nice to the uke he does give blunt remarks with being honest but not in a mean way since he is going to be intelligent he can read people (and he is gonna hide that he is rich (that's something I JUST now came up with while replying to you lol , he is however going to be a savage to people who deserve it
The stereotype is the weak uke who can't do anything for himself.Don;t make him to helpless.Try to avoid the rape trauma, It's been overused. others to try finding a loved one dead in your home. seeing some one killed being part of any violence ending in death Murder can caues just as mush harm and it would be diff. that's just my OP.
i get it, its like those cutesy sweet types that are secretly sadists and only their lover knows. but your doing it opposite. it sounds really interesting, and if he is hiding that he is rich from the one he falls in love with, it sounds great
Oh yes i do agree that the rape trauma has been overused but I have yet to read a story where rape victims are accurately described ,I have personal experience in this area and I wanted to write my thoughts on it , it;s not gonna be " I will overwrite that" thrust thrust grab shlick schlick and BAM healed it's gonna be a long ride (if i make myself motivated to keep on writing)
i want to either do that or find something else since I want a uke that doesn't like to be touched in certain ways, but my uke does have a back bone he is not helpless he says what is on his mind most of the time aside from the secrets he is hiding (lol at my uke)
yeah the seme is a sweet type but not overly sweet cute but serious too playful too at times and DAMN I really fell in love with the image in my head
thanks for your opinion XD
Are you writing it on sites like wattpad?Because I would love to read that :33
you say here that you either want the rape trauma kinda thing or something else, have you thought about an in-between situation? like the uke witnesses his mum or sister being raped when he was young and he tried to fight the guy off and help but being small he just got thrown off or something. and something like that could also account for why he has a backbone kinda. or something.
but otherwise this sounds like an amazing story, i would love to read the finished product!!
eventually when I have enough content I will post it on wattpad right now my account is empty if you like this is account I made yesterday
https://www.wattpad.com/user/YaoiFreaky
Im very new to wattpad (im sooo behind with stuff I didn't know that you can write stuff on there hahaha)
Looking forward in reading your work if youd let me! (=・ω・=)
How about making the seme oblivious to hardships like hes just cruising life with a silver spoon on his mouth. Its too boring if you make a seme whose perfect in everyway. And the uke would compliment the seme coz uke have experienced everything there is to exp. OMG WHERE CAN I FIND YOUR STORY!
oh my that is a good idea actually, instead of a perfect seme i really think that would best i thought i felt something missing because my image made him so perfect thanks!
it;s gonna take me awhile before i have enough for the first chapter both need to have enough story and , i need to fix my english sentences and make them readable before I post them if youd like to wait by next week Im gonna post the first chapter here
it's empty now since I literally made this account 13 hours ago hehe
https://www.wattpad.com/user/YaoiFreaky
Great! Ill be waiting! And will you be posting it here or in wattpad? Ill download the app if that is so.
I decided I'd post the first chapter I don't know if its any good if you like to read it https://www.wattpad.com/367844043-a-lovely-and-yet-painful-encounter-chapter-1-~
you know this is actually a good Idea too ! my mind is making all kinda situations right now but sadly I wrote the first chapter and I don't know how im going to fit this situation in but this is a good idea and I like it the uke I wrote is starting off weak but eventually develops a backbone he is a stuttering mess right now and he is going to fix that on his own instead of the regular seme fixing. thank you for your opinion(▰˘◡˘▰)
Im looking for a yaoi that I read before, I don't remember anything on how they looked like but I remember a guy (he might be a cousin or stepbrother ) who abused the uke and once he told the seme " does he make a sound when you 2 do it? " (because they lived in the same house he couldnt make a sound)
I don't remember much but I remember the uke is scared to make a sound when they do it,
at one point he was kidnapped by the cousin
also if there is some other yaoi where the uke is afraid of sex (for a while ) not only Do it once and BAM cured for life
yasssss thanks this one!
It's from Warui series
It's from Warui series
is there a yaoi/smut manga where a rich seme acting like he is poor because he doesn't trust people that like him for his money and meets an uke that doesn't care whether he is rich or poor
or any other yaoi where the guy is rich and doesn't trust people and misunderstands the uke for liking him for money but then finds out that its not true
That's sounds good, I want to know too lol.
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sorry its not a reply but sounds interesting :)
Im looking for a yaoi manga where the uke feels unworthy for love and thinks he is dirty - and the the seme licks and kisses every inch of that body lovingly (specifically the body kissing and licking)
I don't remember where I read it before but i do remember that there are more then one manga about this
the uke might have been a prostitute of some sort but im not sure
Here's one, but it's not finished. So many feels though ╥﹏╥ http://www.mangago.zone/read-manga/mods/
You're gonna love lastest chapter(24) of this
http://www.mangago.zone/read-manga/saezuru_tori_wa_habatakanai/
ooohh h yes I know that gave me feels for a life time thats why im looking for more shit im gonna read it again now hahaha
I love that I regret starting it before I finished its so good
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im looking for s&m yaoi with consent and where you clearly see they are in love also hoping that they change up a bit to gentleness but not necessarily
I prefer S seme and M slutty uke well not slutty but the type that wont say no stop but more like more more gimme more LOL
what about Yoru wa Tomodachi?
I'm following this
http://www.mangago.zone/read-manga/yume_no_you_na_hanashi/
http://www.mangago.zone/read-manga/blood_bank/
http://www.mangago.zone/read-manga/bi_no_isu/
http://www.mangago.zone/read-manga/kobi_no_kyoujin/ (sequel to bi no isu)
http://www.mangago.zone/read-manga/love_me_hard/
http://www.mangago.zone/read-manga/mayou_otoko/
ive never come across one but I was wondering if there is a a yaoi where you have twins falling in love with other twins?
http://www.mangago.zone/tag/Twincest/
Oh The 1st one isn't twincest, someone must be wrongly tag.
I dont know if I was clear enough I mean't Twins x Twins not 2 brothers together just 2 sets of twins falling in love with another set of twins so that means 4 people
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so anyone getting weird messages?
I just got that message too! ;-;
I actually got one...(╯°Д °)╯╧╧
Cuz the internet knows you're all fat sweaty slobs that really needs to be taken out of the gene pool
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Yes, me too;;
Well , I recieved something related to sex with a women. Help.
I got this message too.
Why is mangago sending us the url of such shaddy sites?
I just went ahead and deleted it, the moment i saw it.
Does that site have some kind of business deal with mangago?
Letting non manga related matters pop up in our mails.
Yeah.. me too! ┑(￣Д ￣)┍
I'm not really sure, I did mark it as spam though hahaha. but yeah. maybe mangago is getting promo's now XD since everything right now is ad related.
...uhh just wondering, why did you get 13 dislike coz of this?
I've got the same message too btw, kinda annoying （￣へ￣）
Me too ╥﹏╥
Same! Is someone pranking us?! (╯°Д °)╯╧╧
I have no idea of the dislikes, as far as I know it's the first time I'm getting so many dislikes hahaha. but I don't mind. maybe people thought it was spam since the first thing that pops up as if I'm advertising or something. maybe they got confused
Yes i thought It was spam at first too Σ( ￣□￣||) I'M SORRY ╥﹏╥
yep -_-
Now it's 15 Σ( ￣□￣||)