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I really like this story, but it feels.... like it was missing some element that I'm looking for. Is it just me or does Noaki and Chizus relationship not really that close? Like, I know they obviously care about each other, but I dunno, it might be the way they storyboard it or drew out the scenes, but it felt like it lacked more father daughter bonding time between the dad and daughter. It's also odd how she called him Noaki-kun and it always felt so distant *shrugs*. I know that when you meet someone knew, you're attached to the first name you associate with them, regardless if it's first or last name, but this is your whole father lol blood daddy relative. You would think she'd call him dad or papa but she calls him by his first name. And it's interesting how she would eventually call Yosshi but dad, and I'm like whaaaat. They(noaki and Chizus) also don't really engage in physical contact alot. Like hugging it kissing or patting. I feel like from a creators/authors/editors perspective, I would change up the scenes to be more tender lol I also think that it probably could've been more dramatic but that's me. It's interesting how Chizu never says who she wants to be with, but I do understand if they decide not to do that as it's not fair to make children choose between parents. But I at least wanted to see how she felt about Noaki or how Noaki felt about her! I just felt it was never addressed. Even Yosshi was like, if you don't tell her how you feel, she'll feel like you didn't want her or etc. And I was expecting some more touching scenes. What do y'all think?