I have just read chapter 13 and here's my opinion...
The concept is good but the execution is lacking. I expected this to be a nice enemies to lovers trope with sexual tension shooting through the roof as they performed together, but as of chapter 13 this is falling short and there's only 11 chapters remaining.
First of all, I can't understand Heejae at all, he went from trying to kick Juhyuk out of the apartment to lusting over him at the blink of an eye. This might be because the story seems to be jumping from one scene to another and even doing some time skips without giving a hint of how much time was skipped.
We can't even say this was one of these tropes where he was actually in love all along or fell in love at first sight because, again, he was straight up trying to send Juhyuk into homelessness.
Talking about homelessness, Juhyuk is adult with adult responsibilities and a full time job, and now he also has to worry about getting a new place, yet it's like he is never tired, never busy. In fact, his schedule seems to be very free since he can be fully invested in the band. Which reminds me, he only played as a hobby for a short while in the past but now he's performing on a TV show and his skills didn't get brought up as a weakness first thing? That doesn't make sense.
One of the band members wearing a mask because she wants to stay anonymous is silly. To top it off, the mask is also tacky. Hell, none of them look like they're a punk band, they look like they're relaxing at home, but they are supposedly on a TV show!
Back to mask girl, why bother adding that detail to the character if her background is obviously not going to be relevant in the story? (If it becomes relevant I will eat my words but it really doesn't seem like the case and such a short story shouldn't waste time on side characters anyway)
Totally agree!
-„romance“ or whatever you call what they have is sudden and out of nowhere
- ML really tried to make MC leave and become potentially homeless, and he really wondered why MC stayed?? haha
- does MC not work?? Like where’s the Korean overtime worker? I thought this might have to become an issue on the long run but nope
- masked girl, I think her reason was not to be recognized by her coworkers, BUT doesn’t MC worry the same then, since he also works in a company. ALSO what happens again if they’d win? Do they debut? Does MC quit his job then??
Even though there are quite a few questions, I’m still staying haha for the art maybe? Idk I like it XD
This is not as bad as some people made it out to be but the loose ends are annoying tbh. I major in literature and some scholars say that adding plot points that add nothing and lead nowhere is a sign of bad writing. I agree with them. These are the loose ends that stood out the most to me:
- Taewoong wanted to dump Dojin
Did the author just forget that Taewoong wanted to dump Dojin? Instead it seems like he forgave Dojin after he mumbled the truth about the fake confession while half-conscious. This was quite the unsatisfying conclusion, and then near the end of the story Taewoong is bothered by the fake confession again. It's like the author had a change of plans halfway through and decided that, for fairness, Dojin should be the one with regrets and not Taewoong.
- Taewoong's brother
Another thing, Taewoong's brother was mentioned when he brought him clothes in one of the chapters. Dojin wants to meet his lover's brother but Taewoong gets embarrassed and says they'll meet later. This seemed like a foreshadowing indicating that the brother would appear later and be quote relevant, but then he never appeared and was never mentioned again either.
To be honest, I thought his brother was gonna end up being the guy that asked if he wasn't falling in love for real, which would explain why Taewoong didn't want them to meet. At some point the supposed brother would accidentally reveal Taewoong's dumping plan to Dojin and drama would ensue.
If done right, that would mean wrapping 2 loose ends at once, and both characters would feel regretful and beg for each other's forgiveness by the end. I like this idea better, but there's no use focusing on what ifs. Oh well...