I'm at chapter 53 but haaa... I gotta say I really don't like where this story is going. It seems like the forced plot is pushing our mc here and there to meet with all these side male interests. It really hinders the mc's character and it just feels unnatural. Like, girl, c'mon, you LIVE with Noah. When some random blue haired duke comes and says Noah wants to see you and takes you to a COMPLETELY DIFFERENT PLACE on a GOD DAMN CARRIGE, all you can say is "uuU tHiS SeEms sUSpiCioUS" ????? What are you, a god damn DUMBASS?? She really acts like a cardboard sometimes, getting pushed around and acting like an idiot just because of plot convinience. You lazy author! (`Д´)ノ
Agree. This is the darling of the genre, but it has some of the choppiest character writing and blatant plot conveniences. I'm waiting for it to finish before I try to push through and rate it again. But I have no enthusiasm.
Takes me back to when I finished my first novel (around a decade ago). I had such an ego, having been talented with fiction writing my whole life. I put it out online since it was my first. I still get emails about it today. Everyone liked it. But it was TRASH and cringe af. I can't even visit that website anymore the embarrassment is too great.
Being talented, I hadn't worked at writing at all. It read very much like this. It's interesting that the plot was very isekai-ish too. I wish I could give the author the advice to go away and work at it.
That doesn't change my point? She lives in the same house as Noah. This dude takes her to a completely different place. Not to mention she met with Noah minutes before this happens + the duke keeps avoiding eye contact and acts sus as hell ++ she only had like what, one interaction with this dude before? (did they even have that? Idk) They don't know each other that well and have no reason to trust each other so blindly. But she follows him without even questioning. Hahaha it's so laughable i can't even-
And when she arrives at the emperor's house (or mantion more like) she just lets this slide like it's no big deal they litteraly kidnapped her. As a cherry on top he(emp) also forces her to stay there. Idk what you think about this but this can be easily categorized as abduction.
If I'm lying in my criticisms you can spit on my face. If you can come up with strong counterpoints that prove this story has good writing I'd like to see you try hahaha. If you're gonna make useless excuses then don't even bother~ (⌒▽⌒)
Sorry for being rude, btw!ヾ(❀╹◡╹)ノ
Did you stop writing? And i think it's ok to write bad, you shouldn't be ashamed of it! The more you write the more you learn and the more you learn the better you get. If you think your past writing is bad than that means you've impoved! So don't be embarressed of your past writings and proudly hold them up with your other works because they indicate you've changed and grown.
I wrote more terrible shit I never uploaded. Put down the pen a few years, then picked it up again. The first novel was written while I was studying writing at college. I can't say I recommend college for fiction writing ( ̄∇ ̄")
When I started writing again, I saw the problems and built skill through writing drills. Dialogue, body language, environmental non-verbal communication, different cultures, disabilities, unlikable characters, unreliable narrators. Brutal editing and perspective switching. A bunch of drills I label 'weird shit' where I'd write a story with an odd focus. Playing with different structural styles was the hardest (especially structuring dialogue - there's literally no rules there and if you pick one style you'll feel the absence of another).
I've self-published a couple of novellas now. I also write fanfiction since it's really relaxing and fun to play in other peoples universes.
I've grown, just like you said. But I'd still nuke my first book if I could get away with it. If it got the reception it deserved, I could take it down without anyone noticing (≧∀≦)
* reads title *
Omg thank youuu~