In MY OPINION, everything happened so fast, so fast that the story and the characters seemed flat and boring. Also, because of that I didn't feel the love that they professed so hard (and that I felt that it came out of nowhere). It is predictable, there is no good development or writing. I would have liked more context. The fact that the seme so easily let a stranger give him a blowjob in the middle of the night, and then take him to his house where his little daughter is... Is there something to explain?
Once again, IT IS MY OPINION, if you thought it was wholesome and cute, ok, I respect it, like every person who should respect the opinions of others
Reading this was like being in F1... that ruined everything to me honestly. And the writing...