While the story wasn’t terrible for a newcomer, I found the characters to be a little too one dimensional and there was a lack of depth to the plot... In that one minute the characters would be in trouble and then they would suddenly have a solution.
It wasn’t all bad, the comedy was pretty good and seeing the food did make me salivate a little lol. But I think a little more editing, and more fleshing out of the world, characters and situations would do wonders to improving the story.
I hope the mangaka takes this story and uses it to improve her next one.
I only liked the food....
While the story wasn’t terrible for a newcomer, I found the characters to be a little too one dimensional and there was a lack of depth to the plot... In that one minute the characters would be in trouble and then they would suddenly have a solution.
It wasn’t all bad, the comedy was pretty good and seeing the food did make me salivate a little lol. But I think a little more editing, and more fleshing out of the world, characters and situations would do wonders to improving the story.
I hope the mangaka takes this story and uses it to improve her next one.