I like this manga but...

Vort September 8, 2020 7:01 pm

I've read the LN and I'm gonna complain so BEWARE SPOILERS

SPOILERS

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First off, I like this enough to fairly enjoy reading it, but there is A LOT of bad writing in this. Like this is obviously a pretty cool setup, right?

Except nope. The author never does anything with it. It's just used so that Art can attend the school, that's it. Apparently the fucking renowned adventurer Note (remember everyone talking about him in the tavern and picking a fight with him for zero reason?) drops off the face of the planet immediately afterward and nobody thinks anything of it. The Wykes, who know that there's someone out there with a vendetta against their kid, and would obviously monitor the situation to at least make sure he abides the restriction and doesn't come near them, aren't the least bit suspicious when he never goes on a single quest ever again? Sorry but that's just a lame contrived setup that anyone who's not a critical reader will just blow past, but anyone with half an ounce of logic in their brain should be stuck scratching their head at.

Stuff like this happens over and over. The author comes up with pretty cool scenarios that just don't fit together well at all. He's a decent writer, but he needs an editor to slap him around and say "you need at least SOME continuity to this, you can't just have action scene after action scene."

Okay flame away, defend the author all you want, I've heard it all when I level similar comments against other mediocre/sub-par writers. "It's their story, let hem write how they want."
"You just think you're smart, but you have no idea what you're talking about."
"Blah blah blah, I'm incapable of critical thought."
<sigh>
/rant

Responses
    ideallynone September 8, 2020 7:14 pm

    i totally agree. it had potential to be such a good story, but it just ended up disappointing me.

    Erys September 9, 2020 1:44 am

    I actually agree but I suck at articulating my own sentences with like everything because the story so far was flowing pretty good had some hiccups and some what the fuck is this happening in wine how the hell did it happen properly type a thing but I know that the next part that’s coming up after this chapter is going to disappoint the living shit out of me it’s gonna just be a piece of shit but I’m still gonna read it because it will have some amount of enjoyment

    Dyna September 9, 2020 2:50 pm

    True, but this is better than what's coming. If you read the novel, then you'll know it's gonna get worst

    ryin16 September 9, 2020 6:15 pm

    Yeah I've read the novel too and never finished. Talk about a let down..sigh...

    Anddd I already marked the moment it'll go to waste so I'm just gonna stick up until then.
    After that I'll drop this(〜 ̄△ ̄)〜

    Eepww September 9, 2020 9:25 pm

    I mean ig from. Ur perspective yeah make some sense. But yeah it is the authors story, and I know if I were writing a story that I would write it how I want yk, not how other want me to, if they wanna change it then they can write it but they aren't ykyk.

    Vort September 10, 2020 1:18 am
    I mean ig from. Ur perspective yeah make some sense. But yeah it is the authors story, and I know if I were writing a story that I would write it how I want yk, not how other want me to, if they wanna change it... Eepww

    Honestly, that is what an editor is these days: almost a co-writer. Editors read your drafts and basically tell the author what sucks and how to fix it (obviously more politely than that). Some people don't have the attention span or creativity or simply the drive to be authors, but excel at detecting weaknesses and/or how to improve them. It's not wrong to point out what an author does poorly, even if it is their prerogative to write their story however poorly they choose.

    Erys September 10, 2020 11:15 am

    I’m actually like that but that might be because I have ADD and dyslexia so it can be hard but I love reading

    Eepww September 10, 2020 5:19 pm
    I’m actually like that but that might be because I have ADD and dyslexia so it can be hard but I love reading Erys

    Ahh I get that

    Rixycat September 11, 2020 11:53 am

    How many episodes it’s gonna be?