Thank you author for trying, someday you'll likely look back on this work as not your greatest but a start

imntru May 15, 2020 10:53 pm

Honestly, the step sibling kink aside, this really wasn't very good. IT DID HAVE POTENTIAL, BUT. squandered it on a directionless plot and characters that were somehow both annoyingly stubborn and paradoxically indecisive.

The plot was convoluted and unnecessarily difficult, nobody's damn motivations made any damn sense (or (at least they weren't really fleshed out enough to make sense) and worse it didn't feel like there was any satisfying conclusion to a whole tom fuckery of nonsense.

ALSO Fuck that Rena girl, she can honestly get hit by a bus, like I know we're supposed to feel bad for her because of her situation, but having a shitty homelife is unfortunately not an excuse to destroy someone's elses life. She's just as bad, if not worse than her mother. TO BE PERFECTLY HONEST her ENTIRE back story and arc was absolutely superfluous.

Save yourself the time and the trouble, read through the comments and spoil this one for yourselves dudes, it only made me mad to read lmao.

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    Fabssiee July 22, 2021 2:18 pm

    Dude, You did such a great job at explaining it. All I could think of while reading your review was "My thoughts exactly."