thanks a lot
I'm sorry, it's really cliche. I like that the girl is in a wheelchair, but else it really is just like every other romance. I'd try not to use the "rich boy whose parents didn't love and now doesn't feel anything" trope. I'm sure you've already seen it be used and although there can be good stories that use the trope, it's really difficult bc of the power imbalance and constant use of the trope. I'd rather try something original where you can develop a real and authentic relationship. Good luck.
Yeah, i agree. It’s still good though but maybe try adding a tragedy to his life instead of being rich and lonely. Maybe his best friend died? Maybe his parents are abusive? You can do whatever you want obviously because it’s your story, but I think these things make it more interesting
I honestly think that would make it even worse. I'd just not have him be rich at all, the sad lonely rich boy is so overused, your story has to be a masterpiece to be good using the trope. The girl having to fix him is also a very bad thing. From the description I'd say the guy has severe depression, and for that you need a therapist and not a love story
That’s why i said he shouldn’t be rich? And my point wasn’t the girl fixing his depression, it was loving him through it. But i digress, whatever OP writes will be what they want to write and not the opinions of two strangers on a manga site
tell your views please on this story.
its just an idea for now. its a bit of a cliche , but the story is about a paralyzed cheerful girl with an optimistic mind who believes there is good in everybody and a lonely rich guy. so the girl was in a car accident with her family when she was 10 years old , where parents died and she was left paralyzed (not being able to walk). she grew up alone with only one close friend , always hoping to have a normal life. the guy's parents are filthy rich , since he was a child he was trained to take over the company. his parents were always busy leaving him alone.he didnt had anyone by his side to rely on.thus grew up to be lonely. he didnt had any feelings (kind of like a robot) always did what his parents told him to.
the main story starts from here...
the girl was in a plane travelling from somewhere to italy . and the guy was on the same place travelling to italy for work. she was so excited to travel in a plane for the first time . she grew up on the insurance money from her parents death , so she didnt have much money to do what she likes, so this was one of her long time wishes, to visit italy. the guy was siting in the window seat and the next seat to him was hers . she wanted the window seat , so she asked him innocently and seeing the wheelchair the guy agreed. then after her constant requests he helped her to sit in the chair and put the wheelchair away , seeing her innocent and excited face , he started to feel something.she was excited to everything . that kind of innocence attracted him .during the whole journey the girl kept on speaking to the guy while he tries to ignore her and keep his cool.there was a small moment when she needed help but she tried to do it herself , that kind of determination impressed him . during the whole flight he smilled only once when she was stuttering trying to speak italian with the air hostess. this whole journey was always memorable for the guy . he turned back as the same old him without feelings when he saw his fathers buttler at the airport while the girl in her wheelchair disappeared in the airport crowd.
please tell me if u like it. its a soft romance. this is just a small part of the story.
its my first time so go easy on me.ヾ(❀╹◡╹)ﾉ~