First story: He's probably dense, but it's a whole 'nother level of denseness and lack of awareness when he tried to sleep with another right after the confession. Indeed, Akira was nonchalant, and it didn't seem like he wanted any progress, so he, too, tried to return to his original lifestyle, but put in another way, it's still really... off putting, for him to be able to do that, and to even try saying those things to the guy he liked. I know he has some sort of bully tendencies, but that was still really bad of him to do that, when he's probsbly aware that it would hurt Akira the most. It would end differently if Akira was able to mask everything, and one day, completely disappear from his life. He probably wouldn't care, because all the whole thing ever did was bother him, as in try to pry into his mind, and it shall probably stay as such. But still, he can't avoid that "what if", and you can't exactly say it's because Akira just left, in the end, it can be attributed to how he acted after the confession. Well, if Akira was able to withstand him and those things for years, their current future in the story is really how it's going to go, but I guess through all this I just disliked how he lacked guilt. Sure, he probably felt guilty, and he's not the only one who did this, but he acted like he never did anything to hurt the guy, and that he was thinking too much, when in fact, he did. And it was all just put off by putting the word "joking" into it, not "lying", not "not serious", joking. As it is, it still feels as though he's not serious, and while it's amazing thag he was able to act against the "no relationship" thought of his, it still doesn't feel like he actually likes him, just plain interest. It's the start, but at that point I'm amazed that they already established a relationship from that alone. Second story: It feels like there's no resolution to it. So they're just going to be that way? The brother-in-law will pine after the man who still can't move on despite 6 years, and at the very least finds him cute, and they'll go on like that forever and ever? It feels like if ever they do go out, it's more like the other guy just relented and thought of making him happy, possibly getting over his wife but still not really liking him. That's kind of the only thing I can see from this one, and I know none of that will make either of them happy. The brother-in-law is admirable for liking the guy continuously, and maybe if he simply gave up his brother-in-law would remarry and he would regret, but while it's selfish to wish that the guy would like him, does he realize it's almost ridiculous to establish a romantic relationship with him if the other guy only merely relents? "Alright, I'll go out with you" seems to be what he's suggesting the other guy to say, but soon you'll probably be dissatisfied and greedy, and then you'l regret that you let your hopes go up.
So what do I want to happen? I can't dictate anything. It's not my story. I know that very well, and I can't have my say in it. My opinion means less than a grain of rice, or a grain of salt, or a particle of an atom. Fine. But I wanted to let out my feelings regarding these stories, and hope to see them happy, and satisfied. No one can be truly like that in real life, but people still work for it, and though they're fictional characters, and my voice can't reach them, nor would it matter to them;
For the first story I want Katsumi to love Akira. To be loyal. To not be simply together with him out of mere interest, or of his own benefit, but simply because he wants to be with him and realize that there's more to being in a relationship with Akira, but despite everything, he still wants to be there for him, and make him happy as well.
For the second story, we have to first answer how will the brother-in-law get over his wife's death. As it is, there's not much progression towards anything, and I cannot foresee any, either. I want him to seriously ponder on the boy's feelings, and if his answer is that he only sees the brother-in-law as, well, a brother-in-law, putting aside taboo and the like, then the boy should accept that. I know it's hard when he's loved him for so long, and that him being with another simply because he relented doesn't seem to be any different if it was with him, but as someone who truly does love him, it's going to hurt everyone. If you were with him, you would someday be more greedy, but he would not be able to give you what you want if he simply doesn't feel that way. If he gets himself another wife, all it'll be is some sort of display, and that she will not be on the level of the original wife, unlesd he falls in love with any of you. Upon which, it is honestly more likely to think of him loving a new, unrelated person over someone who is his brother-in-law, so it's understandable that he became desperate, but then, have you already resolved not to become greedy? Because it will be a huge feat to be able to get away from your sister's shadow and to be liked, as you are. But as it is, how about this? Don't immediately pursue him while waiting for an answer, wait for a compromise. He will not entertain any marriage candidates for a certain period of time, and during that time you should make him fall in love with YOU, rather than just relent and go out with you while he's still thinking of his wife. It'll be hard to progress that way. If he still can't, no matter what, then give up. Even if the futures seem similar, you are aware it's hopeless, and then you could probably give up.
First story: He's probably dense, but it's a whole 'nother level of denseness and lack of awareness when he tried to sleep with another right after the confession. Indeed, Akira was nonchalant, and it didn't seem like he wanted any progress, so he, too, tried to return to his original lifestyle, but put in another way, it's still really... off putting, for him to be able to do that, and to even try saying those things to the guy he liked. I know he has some sort of bully tendencies, but that was still really bad of him to do that, when he's probsbly aware that it would hurt Akira the most. It would end differently if Akira was able to mask everything, and one day, completely disappear from his life. He probably wouldn't care, because all the whole thing ever did was bother him, as in try to pry into his mind, and it shall probably stay as such. But still, he can't avoid that "what if", and you can't exactly say it's because Akira just left, in the end, it can be attributed to how he acted after the confession. Well, if Akira was able to withstand him and those things for years, their current future in the story is really how it's going to go, but I guess through all this I just disliked how he lacked guilt. Sure, he probably felt guilty, and he's not the only one who did this, but he acted like he never did anything to hurt the guy, and that he was thinking too much, when in fact, he did. And it was all just put off by putting the word "joking" into it, not "lying", not "not serious", joking. As it is, it still feels as though he's not serious, and while it's amazing thag he was able to act against the "no relationship" thought of his, it still doesn't feel like he actually likes him, just plain interest. It's the start, but at that point I'm amazed that they already established a relationship from that alone.
Second story: It feels like there's no resolution to it.
So they're just going to be that way? The brother-in-law will pine after the man who still can't move on despite 6 years, and at the very least finds him cute, and they'll go on like that forever and ever? It feels like if ever they do go out, it's more like the other guy just relented and thought of making him happy, possibly getting over his wife but still not really liking him. That's kind of the only thing I can see from this one, and I know none of that will make either of them happy. The brother-in-law is admirable for liking the guy continuously, and maybe if he simply gave up his brother-in-law would remarry and he would regret, but while it's selfish to wish that the guy would like him, does he realize it's almost ridiculous to establish a romantic relationship with him if the other guy only merely relents? "Alright, I'll go out with you" seems to be what he's suggesting the other guy to say, but soon you'll probably be dissatisfied and greedy, and then you'l regret that you let your hopes go up.
So what do I want to happen? I can't dictate anything. It's not my story. I know that very well, and I can't have my say in it. My opinion means less than a grain of rice, or a grain of salt, or a particle of an atom. Fine.
But I wanted to let out my feelings regarding these stories, and hope to see them happy, and satisfied.
No one can be truly like that in real life, but people still work for it, and though they're fictional characters, and my voice can't reach them, nor would it matter to them;
For the first story I want Katsumi to love Akira. To be loyal. To not be simply together with him out of mere interest, or of his own benefit, but simply because he wants to be with him and realize that there's more to being in a relationship with Akira, but despite everything, he still wants to be there for him, and make him happy as well.
For the second story, we have to first answer how will the brother-in-law get over his wife's death. As it is, there's not much progression towards anything, and I cannot foresee any, either. I want him to seriously ponder on the boy's feelings, and if his answer is that he only sees the brother-in-law as, well, a brother-in-law, putting aside taboo and the like, then the boy should accept that. I know it's hard when he's loved him for so long, and that him being with another simply because he relented doesn't seem to be any different if it was with him, but as someone who truly does love him, it's going to hurt everyone. If you were with him, you would someday be more greedy, but he would not be able to give you what you want if he simply doesn't feel that way. If he gets himself another wife, all it'll be is some sort of display, and that she will not be on the level of the original wife, unlesd he falls in love with any of you. Upon which, it is honestly more likely to think of him loving a new, unrelated person over someone who is his brother-in-law, so it's understandable that he became desperate, but then, have you already resolved not to become greedy? Because it will be a huge feat to be able to get away from your sister's shadow and to be liked, as you are. But as it is, how about this? Don't immediately pursue him while waiting for an answer, wait for a compromise. He will not entertain any marriage candidates for a certain period of time, and during that time you should make him fall in love with YOU, rather than just relent and go out with you while he's still thinking of his wife. It'll be hard to progress that way. If he still can't, no matter what, then give up. Even if the futures seem similar, you are aware it's hopeless, and then you could probably give up.