Responses
The 'where I'm seeing you there' seemed choppy compared to the smooth first lines but it was balanced out by the ending which stands out more than the transition due to its sorrowful tone. Great job, nice poem! I love seeing the occasional poem pop up here.
its actually a song, if u r interested u can listen to it here:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hPD-a1FjUtU
have a nice day/evening/night <3
Drink up, baby, look at the stars
I'll kiss you again, between the bars
Where I'm seeing you there, with your hands in the air
Waiting to finally be caught.......