Plot Organization

Saki April 8, 2018 8:52 am

I really love both couples but I kind of wish the author would just focus on one couple at a time instead of switching between the two couples' story within the same chapter. Or at least dedicate the first half of the manga to one couple and the second half to the other. like just when I get invested in one couple's story I suddenly get left hanging when it switches to an almost unrelated plotline for the other couple (I mean I know they're all connected but I feel like their struggles are distinct and separate enough where we don't need to see them both happening all at once). Plus all the flip flopping is slowing down both couple's plots and it feels like not enough is happening each time and I'm left a bit frustrated by the end of the chapter. I love the characters/story and I'll still gladly read whatever the author has to offer, I just wished she would have organized the manga a bit differently.

Responses
    Saki April 8, 2018 9:08 am

    Plus just going by the comments, most people seem to have a preference for the story line of either Sumi and Utou or Miyabi and Keisuke. And now some people are getting frustrated (or even angry) with the couple they're less interested in since the story of the relationship they prefer keeps getting interrupted by the other. It didn't have to be this way, lol!

    chopchop April 8, 2018 7:57 pm

    I definitely agree! Also, I'm not saying there shouldn't be any scenes with Miyabi and Keisuke but their sex scenes or whatever can be extras to their manga called kurui naku no wa boku no ban not this one 'beta'. Like I just want to see the development of Sumi and Utou in this one.

    Saki April 9, 2018 8:16 am
    I definitely agree! Also, I'm not saying there shouldn't be any scenes with Miyabi and Keisuke but their sex scenes or whatever can be extras to their manga called kurui naku no wa boku no ban not this one 'bet... chopchop

    Yes I agree :) Usually I wouldn't mind Miyabi and Keisuke sex scenes since it's pretty hot and I love the two characters and their relationship. In fact I would be willing to read a whole other volume of them just being domestic and happy and maybe exploring how they would handle Miyabi's potential infertility issue. My only problem is that it's hard for me to be invested in the happy sex life of Miyabi and Keisuke when Sumi is miserable and literally being gangraped by a bunch of alphas at the same time. Plus by the 7th chapter most manga would have finished a story arc already but there's barely been any significant relationship developement between Utou and Sumi because their story keeps being interrupted.