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good point!!!

It is a good point! but not what I meant the seme seemed to know what action to expect from the uke, throughout the whole story in my point of veiw. The seme was alway the true S and was just letting a M think he was an S. So it didn't satisfy my 'need'? Is that the word you use? I guess I should of mentioned I wanted a true all out S? Controlling and conniving all the way screwing up.
I just really want to read a story where it doesn't work out the way the controlling one wants. I want that epic facial expression when he realizes he miscalculated and now has to try to fix.
Edit: but I really did enjoy this one. It had a nice twist.