I remember reading this awhile ago, and rereading it now has just made me realize that there’s no conflict in this story.
At literally every point that they could add conflict, they instead just solve it immediately.
Oh he’s transported to a new world and has a collar? Well we know someone who can get it off immediately.
He met these two people just a day ago? Turns out he’s the pair of one. Oh wait! Both of them are actually his pair, and both are totally ok with sharing. Also, he’s conveniently gay, so he has zero qualms about being with a male partner, let alone 2.
He has special healing skills? He can pretty much immediately regrow an arm and fix a leg of his two pairs. No need to work towards that goal, he just achieves it!
Going to meet his pairs families? Everyone immediately loves him and nobody treats him cruelly, differently, or poorly.
Oops, we need something to force a child. How about we say that he has a curse that makes it so he has to have a child in order to break it? Don’t worry, he’ll be totally fine with having a child with one of the two men he has barely known a month.
Also, if they just said that they need a core in order to conceive, how did Mintz get pregnant? He made it seem like it was an accident because his partner didn’t pull out; but if you have to purposefully put a core in, how can anybody get pregnant by accident?
I enjoyed the story as being really simple, I just think it was such a great concept that could have been carried out really interestingly, but it just fell flat. It’s like they had all these plot points that they wanted to do, but only ended up being allowed to do so many chapters, so they just made all of the problems from them be solved instantly instead.
I remember reading this awhile ago, and rereading it now has just made me realize that there’s no conflict in this story.
At literally every point that they could add conflict, they instead just solve it immediately.
Oh he’s transported to a new world and has a collar? Well we know someone who can get it off immediately.
He met these two people just a day ago? Turns out he’s the pair of one. Oh wait! Both of them are actually his pair, and both are totally ok with sharing. Also, he’s conveniently gay, so he has zero qualms about being with a male partner, let alone 2.
He has special healing skills? He can pretty much immediately regrow an arm and fix a leg of his two pairs. No need to work towards that goal, he just achieves it!
Going to meet his pairs families? Everyone immediately loves him and nobody treats him cruelly, differently, or poorly.
Oops, we need something to force a child. How about we say that he has a curse that makes it so he has to have a child in order to break it? Don’t worry, he’ll be totally fine with having a child with one of the two men he has barely known a month.
Also, if they just said that they need a core in order to conceive, how did Mintz get pregnant? He made it seem like it was an accident because his partner didn’t pull out; but if you have to purposefully put a core in, how can anybody get pregnant by accident?
I enjoyed the story as being really simple, I just think it was such a great concept that could have been carried out really interestingly, but it just fell flat. It’s like they had all these plot points that they wanted to do, but only ended up being allowed to do so many chapters, so they just made all of the problems from them be solved instantly instead.