What even is this Story?

Tikky March 2, 2025 3:35 am

You know, I read a lot of stories with the Regression and Revenge Trope, it's sort of a guilty pleasure of mine. Since there are sometimes some more and some less aggressive holes in those, I can just forgive and forget those, because they entertain me and I usually don't have to think about them for too long... unless they jump in my face as if I was out on the Nostromo. So what about this story right here? Well, I've reached Chapter 28 of this and I must say, if the writing was any more inbred, we could call it a fucking sandwich.

The plotline is riddled with stretches and holes so bad, any form of throughline has the integrity of an overcooked noodle - not even snapping, but just sadly smooshing into paste at any point of pressure.
But let's begin with the premise, since there isn't even a synopsis of this out: The Protagonist is the Daughter of the most powerful Duke in the Kingdom, and she's promised to soon be wed to one of the Kindom's three princes, Raymond. After they marry, he sits on the throne, but Sofia, the MC, doesn't know he's actually having an affair with her best friend Samantha and gives no shit about Sofia. Her Family is in his way, because their power is just too great, so he frames them for treason and has them all executed. She returns back into the past by two years, a short time before their engagement was originally announced, so she devises a plan to marry the first prince, Alexis - who's, of course, an illegitimate child with no political power to speak of - in order to sit that one on the throne instead.
Well, at least I wish I could say she devises a plan, but she actually makes it up as she goes along. That in and of itself, as someone being thrown into this situation without real preparation, isn't a problem to me though. The problem comes in when you actually see how she does things.
First off: Protagonist is really early on told by her Love Interest, First Prince Alexis, that she is "good at reading people", which is later being echoed by a situation in the past, in which Raymond came into her jail cell and blabbed to her about his numerous evil plots (we will talk about that later, so keep that in mind) and seemed to be in a good mood, so she tells him "You seems to be in a good mood" and he answers how she got good at reading his mood (or people in general). The thing is, she could have learned that in jail, but it's highly unlikely. Learning something like that when under constant scrutiny is one thing, but she just sat in a cell and barely saw anyone. If anything, she can read him, maybe Samantha, but not people in general. She would need way more experience.
And why was that not a thing she could do before, in my opinion? Well, let's talk about something else to tie into that first, shall we? I love how stories always try to hit the point of someone being evil home by either treating children - or, if available, some sort of otherwordly race - badly (because treating people in general badly is just not that interesting anymore, I guess) or by the author having them talk down to a female person of any age and empasizing the fact that it's a female person. In his case, Raymond thinks about her as someone who "should have" only smiled and gone along with him and his plans, because she was just a stupid woman. But the thing is... I know this is what the author is going for, but first of all, sexism in a time in which this sort of thinking wasn't stigmatized and therefore just normal (there's a cute little word for you, and it's "Indoctrination" - though just the regular mindset of that time, which nobody questioned, would be even more true, but the term Indoctrination might give you a clue) and he wouldn't have been considered evil for thinking that way, which in turn means he doesn't have to be evil to be thinking that way, because it's simply normal - only the smallest number of people would think differently, because they simply have no reason to. Also, that was exactly how she had acted. Within the story, we see her best friend being denied into her home once and she threw a complete Shitfit. I'm supposed to believe they were best friends for ages, but Sofia has never once in their entire friendship said the word "no" to Samantha? Or did she throw an aggressive fit like that and Sofia just didn't question it and kept putting Samantha before everything else? The prince and Samantha's cheating behavior was so obvious too. But Sofia? None the wiser.
She had no talent for reading people; life basically just passed by her, as she let everyone fool her back to front. At this point, I cannot tell if Raymond is supposed to be sexist, when viewed through a modern, western lense, or if he actually said that because "a stupid woman that only smiled and went along with everything" was exactly what he had seen she was the entire time: A willing doormat. Queen of motherfucking density. No way in hell is she now "good at reading people" because she sat in a cell and talked to that soggy napkin a few times.
But aside from that, the story gets all the details wrong: When she first talks to the other prince, Alexis, they are at a ball in the palace and stand on an easily accessible balcony, talking about how Prince Raymond plans to kill Alexis and how she plans to put Alexis on the throne in Raymond's place, but instead of whispering all of that highly dangerous stuff, they shout their shit at each other as if they were a couple of geriatric motherfuckers riddled with aids - overall, she loves shouting things, especially when its about stuff that should be kept secret. For example, that Raymond kidnapped a girl to force her older brother, who's on Alexis' side, to literally stab him in the back when they go to war a few days after said ball at the palace.
Raymond also held his captive, who is also known to the knights of the kingdom, apparently, in a warehouse that belongs to the fucking palace, befitting his role as the human embodiment of a participation award.
Anyway, the prince then doesn't simply confirm her words of someone having been kidnapped, by saving that person and bringing them back, but insists on taking her with him to said warehouse to save them. When in reality, if she was actually involved and this was a trap, she could come with him and get out unharmed anyway, because she wouldn't have been a target of the trap, unless the perp wanted her gone. Neither would have made a difference to Alexis. Taking her would only slow him down and inconvenience him, possibly leading to him losing the sister of one of his most loyal man with a half-assed rescue mission.
MC later wants to learn self defense, but it turns out she almost breaks down just from holding a sword, which was obvious, because you don't teach anyone swordsmenship before checking their stamina and building it up as a fundament. But the trainer, who's btw the girl that was kidnapped before, just hands her a sword and we are supposed to believe they trained just like that. Also, that girl was kidnapped, but the author saw the irony, so they had that 5 feet tall girl, 90 pounds soaking wet, say that it was just because there were "30 men who attacked her at once" - she would have been fine if it had been "only 20", of course. I wish to move on from this world. Please, kill me.
But let's not argue about something that should be clear from the beginning: Even if that was true for the girl who trains her, MC herself wouldn't be able to get to that level with a bit of training, so using up her time, which is a valuable resource when planning on a tight schedule like hers, in order to learn something futile, is pure piss. Because of course they would send even more people to get someone who might be guarded, as they are an i m p o r t a n t noble lady, instead of a commoner, like the trainer who also didn't manage so help herself earlier. Sofia should make sure to have someone of suitable strength at her guard all around the clock and concentrate on planning smarter instead of fighting stupidly, which she simply isn't build for. Especially when self defense and martial arts of any kind have little to nothing in common, as you would need extensive amounts of training and even more experience in the field in order to use what you have learned effectively in an unprepared way, on untrained environments, with unknown opponents.
In fact, when Sofia is then attacked for the first time, a knive is held to her throat and she steps on the assailant's foot, which makes him pull his arm to the side from being startled. I wonder where the author learned about such a move when a knife was being held to one's throat, because that thing would have slit right through her neck with that movement. Darwin Awards, I presume? And she then goes on to punch him while holding her fist in the air in such away that she would have sprained her wrist, even if the person she had hit had not been a man 2 heads taller than her. But it was indeed a man, taller, stronger, more robust - her dinky punches wouldn't do shit. What is with every god damn decision that is made in this story? What is this extended impression of a headless chicken supposed to be?
But anyways, she then decides and says outright, that she doesn't want Raymond and his hoe to know about how she knows about the two of them - she doesn't want them to know that she considers marrying prince Alexis instead. Consequently, in order to find a spy in her own home, she promptly spreads a rumor among the select few she considers possible spies... about her plans to marry prince Alexis. She doesn't even do this herself, but leaves it to her handmaid, which was, in the erased future, the only servant who stayed by them, as their house gradually fell apart. Had I written that story, that specific maid, Annie, would have been the spy, because staying behind doesn't hurt you, if you have backing anyway and so you can keep monitoring and framing them the whole time. Instead, because the one-perfect-friend-maid needs to be innocent, she singles out three of the servants of a huge ducal household - of which one is, for some reason, their chef, which makes me wonder why not any maid in the house could have had eadier access to all the information the spy had and needed, if the fucking head chef in the kitchen was considered suspicious to her - and has them hear three rumors about her marriage plans to Alexis, with three different additional stories as to how they got to know each other. So, that seems like a neat bit of writing here, right? FALSE! That's terrible! Please, don't copy that shit, if you ever wanna write something like that, I implore you!
First of all: She now announced to him something he wouldn't have dreamed of thinking up, resulting in the asshole prince becoming anxious when he certainly didn't have to be made aware like this. Sure, the idea was that he would come right away to ask her about it, so she would know who told him the rumor - but who says he would have even noted that additional info of how they supposedly met? Asking about it would have given her trap away even more obviously. And what if the spy had deemed this info unnecessary and left it out entirely? She would have given up all her cards - which she didn't want to give up right before coming up with that idiotic plan - all for nothing. She could have had them say something untrue about the family and business endeavors or something entirely different, which may or may not have been true. I know too little about the world to make an accurate example, but for the person coming up with the story, having every possibility in the world, this should have been simple.
She also takes the spy out right away with the help of her father. Another stupid mistake: She takes him out, but doesn't force him to keep in contact with the prince, in order to uphold the facade. Now he has given the prince info that Sofia denied, after him being a loyal spy for so long, and suddenly he vanished. Every normal functioning person should be able to reason from that, that the ducal family might have found a spy and if he had gotten false accounts, that might have been exactly what it was - a filter trap, in order to find a spy and whoever they are working for. So he would know to conclude the jig is up and the family of Sofia know he's been spying on them, right? Nooooooooo, apparently not. But I guess that's okay, because the Prince is stupid.
I mean, really, not just because he's obviously dumb, but because the story can't resist mentioning at every miniscule opportunity just how utterly incompetent he is; just how absolutely inferior when held against either of this two brothers. Even the one who's all about his intelligence is still better at swordplay than Raymond. To come back to my earlier point at this opportunity: the only reason MC knows so many details about all the missdeeds Raymond has done, is that he came to her cell in order to gloat about all of his plants, like a little kid trying to impress their mom. Simply a pathetic little loser who can't stand anyone better than him. Don't we all just love fights against clearly unarmed opponents?
Right, but because there wouldn't be any stakes anymore, seeing how worthless Raymond has already become, about 5 chapters into the story, we need to raise them again. God knows, this clown car of a plot needs some sort of hurdle to tumble over. For this, no one will ever let you forget: Only Raymond is the legitimate son of the current Queen. The nobles stand behind Raymond.
... but it's made clear he still wants to marry Sofia, because he needs the power of the most powerful ducal house, even in the erased future, when the only other competing prince was already dead. He only got rid of them, despite having planted false evidence of their alleged treason well beforehand, after he had already taken the throne about two years after Alexis initially died. Though, the time accounts are very convoluted, so I can't say for sure, but that's what makes the most sense going off of Sofias words.
In the current timeline, when Sofia is engaged to Alexis, Raymond has another duke adopt his hoe Samantha, in order for them to connect through a marital bond. So, another duke would have sufficed? Even though Alexis is now alive, has made a fucking lifetime achievemend by ending some war that would have originally cost him his life, AND is engaged to the most influential noble family in the kingdom? How does this even out the stakes? Does the MCs family not have any vassal families? Shouldn't they have a lot of people changing sides?
Additionally, the whole plot with the adoption coincides with the mother of the brainiac third prince almost dying. The third prince is such a genius, who randomly grasps random information from inside the MCs family (which should make you wonder if there might be more spies around, as there usually would be), regarding completely irrelevant shit like MC learning self defense. And yet he was unable to spot his mother being poisoned and even the doctor lying about it, despite his untrusting personality and supposed wisdom, paired with a great information network. The maid who poisoned her had her husband killed in front of her and her child abducted to put pressure on her. None of that showed up on his great information network. MC had to tell him about it.
Yet, without anyone being able to foretell what she would know due to her future knowledge, somehow they anticipated her talking to the maid after she was put in a jail cell and somehow, within the palace's cell, someone shoots an arrow at the maid. Despite being shot in the chest, she's alive for long enough to tell them where her child is being held at, which is lucky for her to even know, but even more lucky that she managed to say it. They then travel to "the outskirts of the city", which shouldn't actually take that fucking long and once they are there, they already hold a newspaper in their hands, talking about the adoption of the hoe into that other dukedom. They literally say that they had them go to the outskirts of town, in order for them to go through with the adoption while they are gone. You are literally telling me it took them so long to the outskirts of town, someone could finish an entire adoption process and publisize it in the newspaper? And for what? What would they have been able to do against something that has literally jack shit to do with them? And what would have happened, had this poor maid not lived long enough to even tell them where to go, with her heart split in two? Whoever thought this up as a trap for MC and her gaggle of monkey brains is an utter clown car.
And I'm sure that's still not all of the sheer dumbassness I had to witness, but my head starts to hurt, trying to piece together all the stupid in this frumpy, fumbled, flanderized fuck of a storyline.

In short: This is the webtoon equivalent of an IQ test that came back negative. It's like their collective brains caught in fire and someone filled in sand to put it out. You'd think that every single character in this mess was the result of a social experiment and the world was just unfortunate enough that someone has left their cage open.

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