YO!! I LIKE YOUR STORY BUT ITS KIND OF RUSH ,NO? LIKE ITS NOT DETAILED. AND THE STORY JUMP FROM ONE SCENARIO TO ANOTHER,FASTER THAN I CAN CHANGE MY UNDERWEAR. FOR EXAMPLE , THE CHAPTER WHERE HE FIND THE HEALER. I WAS SO INTRIGUED WHY SHE GOT DEHYDRATED WHEN THERE'S A BOTTLE OF WATER THERE I WAITED BUT IT WASN'T EXPLAIN. AND THE FEELING THAT EVERY CHAPTER IS MISSING SOMETHING IS KILLING ME!!
YO!! I LIKE YOUR STORY BUT ITS KIND OF RUSH ,NO? LIKE ITS NOT DETAILED. AND THE STORY JUMP FROM ONE SCENARIO TO ANOTHER,FASTER THAN I CAN CHANGE MY UNDERWEAR. FOR EXAMPLE , THE CHAPTER WHERE HE FIND THE HEALER. I WAS SO INTRIGUED WHY SHE GOT DEHYDRATED WHEN THERE'S A BOTTLE OF WATER THERE I WAITED BUT IT WASN'T EXPLAIN. AND THE FEELING THAT EVERY CHAPTER IS MISSING SOMETHING IS KILLING ME!!