The irony of this mentioning poor pacing and structure and it having all of that. First two chapter were a whole lot of text walls. Then the next couple of chapters just seemed to be jumping all over the place. Was he panicking and hiding the manuscript? Why'd he sell out the story? Why were they suddenly have an S&M play and repeircing his nipple? Why was he suddenly doing an S&M play with the old author? Was that normal for them? What connection do the two authors have together? How did the old author get that video? His parents broke into his home and wore tapped it?
This story is just sort of all over the place. Pacing was bad. Text walls that didn't serve much of a purpose. Plot holes everywhere. It's really just not that good. It's not that the smut was bad, just the story around it.
The irony of this mentioning poor pacing and structure and it having all of that.
First two chapter were a whole lot of text walls. Then the next couple of chapters just seemed to be jumping all over the place. Was he panicking and hiding the manuscript? Why'd he sell out the story? Why were they suddenly have an S&M play and repeircing his nipple? Why was he suddenly doing an S&M play with the old author? Was that normal for them? What connection do the two authors have together? How did the old author get that video? His parents broke into his home and wore tapped it?
This story is just sort of all over the place. Pacing was bad. Text walls that didn't serve much of a purpose. Plot holes everywhere. It's really just not that good. It's not that the smut was bad, just the story around it.