The flow, albeit successful at projecting a commentary or snippets of events to gvie that sense of intrigue, went too much into cutting scenes to make a cohessive narrative. Some scenes felt like a jump with no distinction. Like when kazami visits ikuze or when ikuze visits the old author. The days he visit felt like the same time. It totally threw me off. I had to squint at theyre clothes to see its not the same as previous.
yeah, I agree, you explain it well, hope it will be better (but well ...) sometimes the sense of time is weird but its not a fantasy story lol, yeah I squint to the clothes too haha
Also ! the uke is weird too we dont quite understand his psyche, like ok he's a masochist but even that is like trown at us
True, his motivations and intetions are confusing. I liked the story so far, but the selling of kazami’s novel to old author threw me off. Like why did u do that? Just whyyy.
Real
the art style is sweet to the eye but there is some lacuna in the story telling, it adds some atmosphere to the tone of the story but i thing sometimes it gives more the wrong type of complexity where it should not ....i hope there will be more chapters to diffuse all of that ....
and why the old author is more like the older version Kagami mdr