Hhhhgggghhh,I know we can't be picky with gl, but I do think some things could've been done better.
I wish it wasn't so rapey?? Like I get this is a common way to got from point A to point B in smut, but a lady who gets off on luxurious high heels should be a bit more dignified with hoe she expresses her taste.
If you're gonna give a character a fetish, why isn't it the focus of the smut?? This isn't being stepped on in high heels, this is a shoe being gently pressed against a face?
The intro was a bit redundant and the past where they meet on the train could've been better spent on pacing out the smut, so it's a bit more sensual.
If the character has to make a creepy pervert face, I respect it, but at least add some blush lines! It's like I'm reading smut of the Joker.
I think the mc is perhaps a bit too masculine and I'm saying this as a butch number one fan. I think if it was just the muscles, I wouldn't mind it, but it's the fact that we can't see her chest at all, until like two sudden panels of boobs. Those are not small enough to hide completely, even under oversized clothes lol. It kind of feels like someone drew straight smut and added boobs last minute, the way that mc isn't really touched at all until they start scissoring.
Hhhhgggghhh,I know we can't be picky with gl, but I do think some things could've been done better.
I wish it wasn't so rapey?? Like I get this is a common way to got from point A to point B in smut, but a lady who gets off on luxurious high heels should be a bit more dignified with hoe she expresses her taste.
If you're gonna give a character a fetish, why isn't it the focus of the smut?? This isn't being stepped on in high heels, this is a shoe being gently pressed against a face?
The intro was a bit redundant and the past where they meet on the train could've been better spent on pacing out the smut, so it's a bit more sensual.
If the character has to make a creepy pervert face, I respect it, but at least add some blush lines! It's like I'm reading smut of the Joker.
I think the mc is perhaps a bit too masculine and I'm saying this as a butch number one fan. I think if it was just the muscles, I wouldn't mind it, but it's the fact that we can't see her chest at all, until like two sudden panels of boobs. Those are not small enough to hide completely, even under oversized clothes lol.
It kind of feels like someone drew straight smut and added boobs last minute, the way that mc isn't really touched at all until they start scissoring.