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No I fully agree, he’s like “I’m ready to die. Actually I want to live. No I have to die or my family will suffer. Oh no, he’s gonna kill me!”
And as you said it’s fine for a character to flip-flop when they’re facing death, but you’ve got to show the reader why he’s flip-flopping otherwise it just comes across as a weak character. There was no pause between him saying “I want to sacrifice myself and die for my family” then, when he thinks he’s about to be killed, going “uh oh, if I don’t get out of here, I’m going to die!” Well yeah, that was the reason you walked into the room…
Almost didn't get shit because of how fast pace it was,,, there's no fucking timing and build up (ik it's bcoz it's still 10 ch but still.. it's a meh)
Also how the mc's emotion switch up doesn't seem all natural to me. Idk how to explain it well, but it feels lacking when we're talking abt his internal dilemma abt dying and wanting to live.