The flow of this story really isn’t that great. The way she left her family didn’t make sense. I felt like I missed something in between him magically arriving in another country. Them flirting and falling for each other feels fast, unnatural, and just crazy. They should have started as friends. I like the relationship he has with his family especially between him and his brother.
I do think this story could have been more enjoyable if they were older like at least 15 preferably 16. If they would have met at the academy I feel it would have been better because than they’ve be older and hopefully the relationship could have looked more natural. It just looks weird.
The flow of this story really isn’t that great.
The way she left her family didn’t make sense.
I felt like I missed something in between him magically arriving in another country.
Them flirting and falling for each other feels fast, unnatural, and just crazy. They should have started as friends.
I like the relationship he has with his family especially between him and his brother.
I do think this story could have been more enjoyable if they were older like at least 15 preferably 16. If they would have met at the academy I feel it would have been better because than they’ve be older and hopefully the relationship could have looked more natural. It just looks weird.
Honestly the writing just feels lazy!