Sigh, I prefer VVS fan translations over the official ones. For instance, in the 2nd to the last bubble: "Then feel free to get rid of me" > "Please feel free to remove me"
To the officials: Remove him from what? A list? He's referring to his presence/existence in its entirety (bcs in the raws, the literal translation is: "clean me up". not in the sense of removing dirt, but removing traces of him). So it just doesn't feel right ╥﹏╥
I think, to maintain the 'historical/old-fashioned ambiance', aside from VVS ver, another way to say this is: "I wish to be dismissed/expelled/exiled." However, this sentence eliminates the weight of Myungha's words in subtly suggesting he's okay with being killed. It's also awkward to typeset this sentence, so considering the shaping, it could be: "Then | please remove | any traces | of me." Character counts per line, incl spaces that determine the width, will be: 4, 13, 10, 5 in contrast with the officials: 6+1 (ellipsis/3 dots counts as 1 character), 12, 9 and the VVS ver (I love your work guys): 4, 9, 10, 5 (Not yet trying it on PS, just imagining while writing this lol)
Oh and where did the officials get that ellipsis? There's no ellipsis in the raws lmaoo
Sigh, I prefer VVS fan translations over the official ones. For instance, in the 2nd to the last bubble:
"Then feel free to get rid of me" > "Please feel free to remove me"
To the officials: Remove him from what? A list? He's referring to his presence/existence in its entirety (bcs in the raws, the literal translation is: "clean me up". not in the sense of removing dirt, but removing traces of him). So it just doesn't feel right ╥﹏╥
I think, to maintain the 'historical/old-fashioned ambiance', aside from VVS ver, another way to say this is: "I wish to be dismissed/expelled/exiled." However, this sentence eliminates the weight of Myungha's words in subtly suggesting he's okay with being killed. It's also awkward to typeset this sentence, so considering the shaping, it could be:
"Then | please remove | any traces | of me."
Character counts per line, incl spaces that determine the width, will be: 4, 13, 10, 5
in contrast with the officials: 6+1 (ellipsis/3 dots counts as 1 character), 12, 9
and the VVS ver (I love your work guys): 4, 9, 10, 5
(Not yet trying it on PS, just imagining while writing this lol)
Oh and where did the officials get that ellipsis? There's no ellipsis in the raws lmaoo