Im disappointed, and it has such a good premise. This story is choppy and has a horrible story writing pace that makes it jump all over the place.
It truly felt unorganized and uncoordinated, which was SUCH A SHAME since it was really cute if you could read past it. Some moments are better told than others and u get a clearer picture, but this just wasn’t it. It felt like a story being told by AI if I’m being frank.
If anyone knows of another story with a similar premise and better narrative telling I’d appreciate the recommendations.
EDIT: edited to say - I did not mean the translations, the story is just narratively bad. And when I say that it is horribly written, I’m saying PERSONAL opinion. “Horribly” is a strong word, but sincerely it is jumpy - as in the story is at one point and then a completely different point - and choppy - as in you missed an entire plot line. They’re trying to rush to get to their favorite points but miss so much critical info while at it.
Im disappointed, and it has such a good premise. This story is choppy and has a horrible story writing pace that makes it jump all over the place.
It truly felt unorganized and uncoordinated, which was SUCH A SHAME since it was really cute if you could read past it. Some moments are better told than others and u get a clearer picture, but this just wasn’t it. It felt like a story being told by AI if I’m being frank.
If anyone knows of another story with a similar premise and better narrative telling I’d appreciate the recommendations.
EDIT: edited to say - I did not mean the translations, the story is just narratively bad.
And when I say that it is horribly written, I’m saying PERSONAL opinion.
“Horribly” is a strong word, but sincerely it is jumpy - as in the story is at one point and then a completely different point - and choppy - as in you missed an entire plot line. They’re trying to rush to get to their favorite points but miss so much critical info while at it.