Honest opinions pleaseeee!!!!

Kisa-chan April 25, 2017 1:52 pm

Hi everyone! (=・ω・=)
So i wrote another yaoi one shot. Can you read and criticize it? Pleaseeeee.

Here is da link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/107227211-chapstick-boy-x-boy-yaoi

Responses
    Hana April 25, 2017 1:56 pm

    it is in english? because i can not understand any langauge except english, wait a minute then i will give you my opinion about it

    Kisa-chan April 25, 2017 2:00 pm
    it is in english? because i can not understand any langauge except english, wait a minute then i will give you my opinion about it Hana

    Yes it is written in english :D okay thank you very muuuuch.

    Jules April 25, 2017 2:43 pm

    It was pretty good in my opinion, but what do I know ╮( ̄▽ ̄)╭

    Hana April 25, 2017 2:56 pm

    I ever make one yaoi story but that doesn't include any sex scene cause i make it in english, i am suck at english while it has relate to sex vocabulary, because my country doesnt speak english, english is a foreign language for us, but i love to make a story in english, okay my opinion the story is really adorable, the sex scene is wonderful too. it is a lovey dovey story, i dont hate it, i will be more happy if you make another chapter for them. your story doesnt make me bored at all. keep your good work. i also like to write doujinshi in english but i never publish it in watpad

    Kisa-chan April 25, 2017 2:56 pm
    It was pretty good in my opinion, but what do I know ╮( ̄▽ ̄)╭ Jules

    Omg is dat so? Thank you very muuuuch. ⁄(⁄ ⁄·⁄ω⁄·⁄ ⁄)⁄

    Kisa-chan April 25, 2017 3:01 pm
    I ever make one yaoi story but that doesn't include any sex scene cause i make it in english, i am suck at english while it has relate to sex vocabulary, because my country doesnt speak english, english is a fo... Hana

    Uwaaah! Really? I am sooo happy after reading your feedback. It gave me more motivation in writing BL stuff. :) thank you so sooo muuuuch. ⁄(⁄ ⁄·⁄ω⁄·⁄ ⁄)⁄

    Oh and if ever you want someone to read ur works just tell me. I'll gladly read it. (๑•ㅂ•)و✧

    Kisa-chan April 25, 2017 3:41 pm
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    Omg you're da first one to point out dat twist!!! ε=ε=(ノ≧∇≦)ノ

    Uhm... Sorry but i was really never good in writing long stories bc i often procrastinate then da tendency is i forgot da plot of da story (i know sounds it sounds stupid but dats just how it is lol) so in da end I won't be able to finish it. Oh and yeah everything escalated quickly, actually i intend to write it in a more fluffy way but i end up writing it in a more smutty way so ╮( ̄▽ ̄)╭

    But if you still want to read more. You can read dis: https://www.wattpad.com/story/104209675-pencil-boy-x-boy-yaoi
    Dat one is my first bl story. (Warning!!! If ever you're going to read dis. There is incest and threesome included)--- tell me if you are going to read it, I'd love to hear your opinions about it. (=・ω・=)

    Lastly, thank you very much for taking ur time reading it!!!!

    Hana April 25, 2017 4:48 pm

    thank you for your support but i am not good at making bl story eventough i like writing. one problem is you are too good as a writer. i mean you must make the character suffer so much then the reader will enjoy it the most. someone said to me a good writer is the one who can make the character live in pain.

    Kisa-chan April 26, 2017 12:08 am
    thank you for your support but i am not good at making bl story eventough i like writing. one problem is you are too good as a writer. i mean you must make the character suffer so much then the reader will enj... Hana

    You're welcome :)
    Ooohh. Is dat how it is???

    Kisa-chan April 26, 2017 12:13 am
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    Hahaha well threesome will always be hot af plus it has some twincest so it was like a plus plus lol. ε=ε=(ノ≧∇≦)ノ
    Okay I'll let u know immediately if ever it got a new chap (tho i cant assure u dat there will be a continuation of it)