This is my first time commenting, but I have never been so disappointed by something so flawed. To say that I never comment on stories this bad and remain silent would be an understatement. Throughout the story, the characters had many opportunities to be developed, yet they ended up being one-dimensional. The plot could have been written much better, but the focus seemed to be on nothing significant. There was barely any world-building to make sense of the events, which is acceptable in some stories, but it left a lot to be desired
Additionally, the main character had me internally screaming “whore” throughout the entire narrative. This could have been a "why choose" story—where the main character doesn’t have to choose and can be with each love interest—which was likely the author’s intention from the beginning or at least by chapter 47. However, it was executed poorly. I hated it so much that I wished for all the characters to meet their demise, as nobody seemed to deserve a happy ending
The climactic scenes did not feel climactic at all, and the main character faced no consequences for any of his actions. He was incredibly annoying, his personality was not funny, and he did nothing to warrant the attention of all the love interests. He came across as a nuisance and an outright Mary Sue. They never explained why they needed his body specifically when he has a brother. The shocking twist of the love interest getting possessed didn’t hold up either; if possession was possible, wouldn't he have been the better choice, even if he was a more difficult option?
None of this made sense. The actions had no consequences, and they never depicted how traumatized the main character was from being violated. That is not something to take lightly, yet he suddenly seemed ready to be intimate again. As someone who reads a lot of smut, this portrayal didn’t make sense without a proper reason, but the author failed to provide one. The main character behaved embarrassingly in public without facing any repercussions, which frankly gives off the vibe of "I’m the main character, so it makes sense." If this was the author’s sense of humor, I would have to reevaluate what humor really means
This was such a disappointing outcome, and there seems to be no way of fixing this, as it constitutes most of the story already. If you enjoyed this, that’s perfectly fine, but it truly pulled the comment anxiety out of me to express all of this. Thank you for reading if you made it this far.
This is my first time commenting, but I have never been so disappointed by something so flawed. To say that I never comment on stories this bad and remain silent would be an understatement. Throughout the story, the characters had many opportunities to be developed, yet they ended up being one-dimensional. The plot could have been written much better, but the focus seemed to be on nothing significant. There was barely any world-building to make sense of the events, which is acceptable in some stories, but it left a lot to be desired
Additionally, the main character had me internally screaming “whore” throughout the entire narrative. This could have been a "why choose" story—where the main character doesn’t have to choose and can be with each love interest—which was likely the author’s intention from the beginning or at least by chapter 47. However, it was executed poorly. I hated it so much that I wished for all the characters to meet their demise, as nobody seemed to deserve a happy ending
The climactic scenes did not feel climactic at all, and the main character faced no consequences for any of his actions. He was incredibly annoying, his personality was not funny, and he did nothing to warrant the attention of all the love interests. He came across as a nuisance and an outright Mary Sue. They never explained why they needed his body specifically when he has a brother. The shocking twist of the love interest getting possessed didn’t hold up either; if possession was possible, wouldn't he have been the better choice, even if he was a more difficult option?
None of this made sense. The actions had no consequences, and they never depicted how traumatized the main character was from being violated. That is not something to take lightly, yet he suddenly seemed ready to be intimate again. As someone who reads a lot of smut, this portrayal didn’t make sense without a proper reason, but the author failed to provide one. The main character behaved embarrassingly in public without facing any repercussions, which frankly gives off the vibe of "I’m the main character, so it makes sense." If this was the author’s sense of humor, I would have to reevaluate what humor really means
This was such a disappointing outcome, and there seems to be no way of fixing this, as it constitutes most of the story already. If you enjoyed this, that’s perfectly fine, but it truly pulled the comment anxiety out of me to express all of this. Thank you for reading if you made it this far.