why
Well for starters the random smut in the beginning of the latest chapter with no explanation
It’s a type of storytelling, there’s nothing random about it. You’re just too used to chronological order of things
I get that and I appreciate all forms of storytelling as I’m a writer myself but I’ve read the raws and there’s not much explanation but ig if it’s intentional I respect that but my comment was my own opinion and I said no offence so
I understand :)
I think it was the author showing the older them, that they’re together. Seems like the author does wanna move into the smut, or maybe they were pressured to include it to keep readers invested.
Yeah I get that and I alr knew that too but like i said the pacing is off for me therefore it’s just a personal opinion that I wasn’t fond of the way the smut was presented but I still like the story just an OPINION yall
so true. execution not only on that specific chapter is so OFF. his dad that feels non existent (atp jus make the dad an overseas worker not jus a "busy man"). the coach being a full as nuance throughout the start of the story only to get overthrown after two or three chapters with a super BAD RESOLUTION (the abuse was fckng real and should be discussed a lot more but bcs its bl u should jus forget abt it??). the twin siblings (brother) redemption was so fckng random n could be executed way better. their games also ain't explained that good (or its jus me). feels like the story's getting to fast so we could reach the point where they fuck fast
EXACTLY like atp it just feels like plot holes, it really makes me confused while reading
The pacing of this story is so off no offence