What it needed was a longer arc where the MC drops subtle hints about his identity and everyone figures it out for themselves. But even then without any precedent to justify believing the supernatural it still would have felt undeveloped.
What should have happend was at least once or twice around the time he was rejecting the ML, he should have tried to explain that his time is limited. It would have triggered the mls abandonment issues leading to him having pointing out or imply that his sudden extreme change in personality was supernatural. The ML could have assumed he just had Multi personality disorder. That way when the MC finally came back the ML figuring it out would have made sense.
Sudden change in personality,
Implied his body is not his own
Knew major before they happen
Died but doppelganger appears
Doppelganger knows too much.
Specific way of cooking
And to end he could have cryptically said "its okay if you dont recognize me" leading to the ML eventually stewing over the meani ng forcing him to accept the supernatural explanation because there is no other answer and the mc already implied it several times.....but thats not what we got....(づ￣ ³￣)づ
Well yes, there were actually several ways to make the whole thing more coherent. But in the end I still felt literally kicked out of the story with the "explanation".
I was pretty immersed in the protagonists' cat vs mouse game, but when the magical duo popped I just lost focus and ended up with a shit ton of questions about them instead of the main characters
Like who are they,
what's this power,
how did they discover it
and master it enough to be able to send a specific person at a specific time of a specific book,
how would they know they are the only two in the whole world who possess it,
what the heck is their relationship and
why on earth would this girl hate her magical gay brother so much that she'd fuck him up like that,
how did the guy found out his crush was sent in a book and which one,
how does this world actually function since the mc just incarnated the "lousy side top"
-top, huh?! （￣へ￣）-
Meanwhile magical gay bro somehow created a whole brand new character for himself,
What happened to the magical siblings after the mc went back in the book,
How much time passes in their world vs the book's world since it looks like he just took a nap irl when he lived for months one the book,
Etc etc
... I've got LOTS of questions lol.
That's why I was very dissatisfied with this read ^^
I agree. But part ofnthe problem with that was how rushed everything got the moment he went back home. You can tell the author wanted to quickly wrap things up the moment the MC died.
Yes the ending just finished to entirely piss me off and made me rant in the comment section xD it was just absurd. Better stay dead if you're going to get that kind of fake ass grotesque réunion, for real x')
I didnt read any of your comment but since you wrote so much could you tell me is this like a really frustrating triangle where the dark haired guy is indecisive about the two who like him. Or is it obvious who he wants to be with? And one last question when does he choose? I'm not the biggest fan of triangles if they are frustrating.
It's not a frustrating love triangle in the sense that yes, it's very obvious who he wants to be with and you could say he chooses since the very beginning since he was never interested in the other guy.
Also, the object of affection in this love triangle is the red head, contrariwise of what the plot of the book planned in the story
Ah OK thanks for telling me, I started it and was not expecting the red head to be the object of affection but I'll look forward to seeing it happen.
It wasn't that good.
It's an Isekai so of course the plot was gonna be a sieve, and at that it didn't fail.
It had good points though.
The art -especially the food- was good even though the proportions were often off, or was it the perspective? I probably shouldn't point this out but the dramatic panels with the protagonists being twice the size of trucks were... Funny?
The characters were endearing but all in all, their personality were bland and beside Mujin, didn't have any development.
The kids were adorable and I sincerely laughed a few times.
But tbh, that's all.
It certainly can be enough for a lot of people but my suspension of disbelief got dropkicked right in the balls here,
And I think it's because of the author's tentative for explanations.
When you write something as fanciful as an Isekai, there are two ways:
Either you start the explanation that fits the laws of the universe you created,
Or you don't explain anything and focus on the story you want to tell.
Here the author tried to do both but came up with the explanation way too late in the story, and it seriously came out of nowhere, the villain popped out just because she was needed and never had any other roles than to explain the unexplainable with some vague magic power that had no substance or other purpose than to make shit happen.
The word "transmigration" was even thrown there like it was all planned and well thought of but sooooooo far in the story that it wasn't even needed.
So this kind of ruined the immersion for me.
I was okay with following the Isekai love story with its own intrigues and incidents, the protagonist even managed to become part of the universe with his own emotions and storyline, leaving aside his original intention of not tampering with the initial plot very naturally but suddenly BAM!
Here comes the rushed, incoherent and unnecessary explanation of the whole shit that nobody asked for, 10 bullshit chapters for free.
Also they were running in circles for a while, it kinda frustrated me, and their reunion felt really unnatural and rushed af.
He s dead, boy. You were at his funeral.
Doubt it at least for a while, don't just date a zombie because you're so in love ffs