So I get the beginning and it makes sense up until Omega lead stops the alphas from raping the alpha lead. There’s no reason given for why he would and it felt like I skipped a huge part that showed omega lead getting the feels. And it’s not explained after either. So the biggest plot hole here is that I never saw the omega lead falling in love at all but then he’s popping in and saving the alpha lead and all of a sudden in in tune with the part of him that is in love? Like only the alpha lead had his love explained/shown to the readers. The side omega’s bad fate made sense because of his bad decisions (and it makes sense the omega lead wouldn’t give a crap about him since nowhere did it ever show that he cared about anyone) and I’m actually glad that it didn’t end up that the teacher kidnapped him and locked him away or something (I was low key scared of this when they mentioned the teacher and the student were both missing) but it does sit bad with me that both the pedos in this story had nothing happen that would have them take responsibility for what they did. Overall, I can make out what the goal was here but the biggest pitfall that causes none of it to make sense is that we have 0 insight into any of the omega lead’s thoughts on anyone except the pedo that raped him first and continued to traumatize him, thus making the whole story feel like it was glue sticked together. The story just doesn’t flow well and doesn’t let readers get to know 1/2 of the main characters.
So I get the beginning and it makes sense up until Omega lead stops the alphas from raping the alpha lead. There’s no reason given for why he would and it felt like I skipped a huge part that showed omega lead getting the feels. And it’s not explained after either. So the biggest plot hole here is that I never saw the omega lead falling in love at all but then he’s popping in and saving the alpha lead and all of a sudden in in tune with the part of him that is in love? Like only the alpha lead had his love explained/shown to the readers.
The side omega’s bad fate made sense because of his bad decisions (and it makes sense the omega lead wouldn’t give a crap about him since nowhere did it ever show that he cared about anyone) and I’m actually glad that it didn’t end up that the teacher kidnapped him and locked him away or something (I was low key scared of this when they mentioned the teacher and the student were both missing) but it does sit bad with me that both the pedos in this story had nothing happen that would have them take responsibility for what they did.
Overall, I can make out what the goal was here but the biggest pitfall that causes none of it to make sense is that we have 0 insight into any of the omega lead’s thoughts on anyone except the pedo that raped him first and continued to traumatize him, thus making the whole story feel like it was glue sticked together. The story just doesn’t flow well and doesn’t let readers get to know 1/2 of the main characters.