This story felt like there's a ton of missing pages throughout the entire thing. Both in terms of their relationship but also in terms of the whole business/inheritance/family plot that feels like the author has written everything but then cut entire segments out every 10 pages of the final story, so you're left with a very shallow end product.
I quite like complicated plots, but there was too many supposedly complicated characters and plots that were never actually shown. There's no reason to make every character uniquely complicated with very complicated connections, if you're not going to dive into it and show us how, they got there.
I don't know much about business, but for it to be a plot that's interesting to read about, I feel like you need to actually show us the work that's put into it and not just tell us in long sentences about what needs to be done and then skip to now it's done.... That's not interesting at all.
It's not a horrible story at all, but it isn't really good either which is a shame because it had sooo much potential. I want to read this story! just in a better version...
Enough ranting from me. I'm probably going to leave this un-rated, because I just don't know...
This story felt like there's a ton of missing pages throughout the entire thing. Both in terms of their relationship but also in terms of the whole business/inheritance/family plot that feels like the author has written everything but then cut entire segments out every 10 pages of the final story, so you're left with a very shallow end product.
I quite like complicated plots, but there was too many supposedly complicated characters and plots that were never actually shown. There's no reason to make every character uniquely complicated with very complicated connections, if you're not going to dive into it and show us how, they got there.
I don't know much about business, but for it to be a plot that's interesting to read about, I feel like you need to actually show us the work that's put into it and not just tell us in long sentences about what needs to be done and then skip to now it's done.... That's not interesting at all.
It's not a horrible story at all, but it isn't really good either which is a shame because it had sooo much potential. I want to read this story! just in a better version...
Enough ranting from me. I'm probably going to leave this un-rated, because I just don't know...