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Rather than the writing, I think the artist and the adaptation is the issue. I've heard that the original novel had no smut and the artist team decided to put smut in the adaptation -- making it weird and fetishy and actually also making it a bit rapey. I imagine it was their decision to make the MC look 11 too
You're right ;_; the smut looks so forced into the story like if this was shounen-ai it could work a bit but the insufferable mc and ml still would annoy me but at least their intimate moments which feel so rapey wouldn't make me cringe （/TДT)/
This story is so fucking...nonsensical. filled with clichéd tropes. I think the writer just wanted to fuck one of the characters in their game and decided to write this fanfic about it. But they have no sense of plot or characters and rely on clichéd characteristics...I don't get it. This story doesn't deserve this art.
And as for the MC, the biggest issue i haven't isn't even his lack of know-how or how incompetent and useless he is...but the fact that he looks like an 11 year old. I really hate that in bls when it looks like a 30 year old is fucking a 11 year old boy. Like be fr.
The ML himself is so boring. That's the worst part about him. It isn't even that he is controlling, sorta abusive, and audacious...but that he is boring. Literally everyone apart from the mc and ml are okay.
I can see the potential but the execution is so trash. I can't. Dropped it at chapter 18. This story doesn't deserve 9.2. Rating.