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Ur so real for this, giving props to the artist bc it usually the art that carries shitty manhwas like this bc the author has some questionable writing but the artist ate
No bc the art is slaying girl (๑•ㅂ•)و✧
Dear artist, you ate <3. The art is amazing they all look great, slay queen, and with that being said the story is literally making me have to sit down and contemplate it's contents for 2 hours and then eat Wingstop bc what the actual hell. I think I want to bring up some points first and then some points on how to try and steer it in the right direction.
1. Sex over actual char. development (I get that they're good, but you just can't replace it with actual characterization) (I would have had no problem with just endless sex if the story didn't try and make it seem like it had a cohesive plot - stick with one and don't try acting like its both)
2. Our ml is not even fucking likeable in the least (U ruined his fucking life and then act like it's a game) (I'm being so fr that I would be ok with this is if it was just contextualized differently (mc abrasiveness, purposefully being mean, etc.) but the fact that they had no connection and he just fucking appeared and wrecked everything made me legitimately so angry)
3. Expansion on point 2: WHAT THE ACTUAL HELL AM I SUPPOSE TO ROOT FOR BC I CANNOT ROOT FOR ANYTHING RN. (The mc's decision making in trying to get with the ml which is not something I think anyone wants, ml is ml, AND WE STILL HAVE HAD NO CHARACTERIZATION FROM THE OTHER CHARACTERS, IM STILL WAITING)
In the end, I think we can see the main problem of this entire story is: We don't know who to like and root for and the author is fucking us over in trying to make us guess who, leading to having no point and being disappointing overall.
WELL, I HAVE A FUCKING PLAN.
1. OH BABY YOU GOT TO CUT THAT THREADDD. (Actually a great fucking idea, dear morally grey Uncle you ate with that) (We need separation right the fuck now bc if ml and mc's relationship drags on it will be hell)
2. DEFINE THE GANGSTER (If his thread was cut from mc was he actually suppose to be his male love interest? Was this meant to be a gangster x normal person all a long? What I can say is that by defining his place in the story, MORE PARTICULARY IN A RELATIONSHIP WIH THE MC WOULD BE GREAT. Why? Because we don't know shit about him and adding him into to try and fix fate would be such a slay)
3. END OF RELATIONSHIP: Well idc who mc ends up with but it has to be good (I hope its the gangster but still) this turns into:
1. Mc running from a toxic ass relationship with ml not evening fucking loving him yet (it's an obsession) and getting into a sweet one with the gangster.
2. We're about to see the most tragic ass redemption arc in history, and with the context I already have I don't think I can actually fucking forgive the ml
I think the main roots for this entire story is giving more context to the characters actions and behaviors rather than just trying to say its for a deep reason. We don't know the reason fucking show us and actually try to put thought and effort into it. The power imbalance with "fate" and "destiny" is also really bad showing us it's not the characters decision its THE AUTHORS.
PS: I definitely think this story needs more time to marinate, but the thing that is pissing me off is the mc's brother x gangster bc now it's showing us that cutting that thread messed shit up badly and I can't legitimately root for it bc now I know that mc's brother and gangster were never meant to be.
The story has shown no elements or set precedents of DEFYING FATE. IT HAS BEEN CONSISTENT FATE VIA RULE BREAKS AND I NEED IT TO GIVE ME A CLEAR ANSWER.