The pacing of this story is really.... dragging. It's to the point that I can't remember the last chapter that didn't feel like filler. By a few chapters in, only one sentence per chapter has any sort of impact on the story and the rest is just rehashing what we know.
It's the sort of pacing that makes me feel like we were supposed to be seeing 2 POVs, with 1 furthering the plot and the other filling it out. What we got was only the 2nd pov that offers fluff. It's like things are going on behind the scenes and we are meant to see it as intriguing, but with the lack of any depth to the main story it instead feels hollow.
It's like things happen to and around MC and we see his reactions. We don't see him actually prepare, plan or do anything. Even when it comes to thinking his mind is one track and circles to the same things. He doesn't personally push the story forward. It's more like he's along for the ride and we are watching the fallout.
I do like the concept, art and think the dialog is written well. It's just the pacing and placement of content that kills the heartbeat here for me. I would give it a try as a novel, since I feel like most of what is missing would be easier to convey.
The pacing of this story is really.... dragging. It's to the point that I can't remember the last chapter that didn't feel like filler. By a few chapters in, only one sentence per chapter has any sort of impact on the story and the rest is just rehashing what we know.
It's the sort of pacing that makes me feel like we were supposed to be seeing 2 POVs, with 1 furthering the plot and the other filling it out. What we got was only the 2nd pov that offers fluff. It's like things are going on behind the scenes and we are meant to see it as intriguing, but with the lack of any depth to the main story it instead feels hollow.
It's like things happen to and around MC and we see his reactions. We don't see him actually prepare, plan or do anything. Even when it comes to thinking his mind is one track and circles to the same things. He doesn't personally push the story forward. It's more like he's along for the ride and we are watching the fallout.
I do like the concept, art and think the dialog is written well. It's just the pacing and placement of content that kills the heartbeat here for me. I would give it a try as a novel, since I feel like most of what is missing would be easier to convey.