Eh, blonde guy suddenly falling in love after never being able to do so previously felt kind of rushed. What did he fall in love with? What sparked the change? Just kindness? Can’t really buy it. This needed a few more chapters to make it feel more natural and believable. They both could have been fleshed out more as characters
Eh, blonde guy suddenly falling in love after never being able to do so previously felt kind of rushed. What did he fall in love with? What sparked the change? Just kindness? Can’t really buy it. This needed a few more chapters to make it feel more natural and believable. They both could have been fleshed out more as characters