Good presentation. Are you studying media journalism and critiqued writing?
Nope, but I did have to study the basics for both of those because of my track, as well as some competitions.
Well that's more than basic, its excellent.
I never expected this to ever happen in this site but thank you so much!
Your very welcome. Not every reader is a school kid. There are a lot of well educated mature females on here. Your writing, grammar and presentation will open up wonderful opportunities for you. My colleagues agree also. We work in/on media reviews. No scrap that-we are bloody slaves to the industry. Lol! The best of luck in your endeavours.
The story has good world building, and a more realistic flare to the murim world, despite internal energy and the MC's x-ray ability and such being included.
The inclusion of history, politics, and power dynamics within each place and the timeline is magnificent, honestly they're so heavy that it's kind of hard to grasp, but it's all well and worth it.
I especially like the characterization in each character, sometimes it's fast paced or left stagnant, but when they do have character arcs they're so satisfying; they explore the inner workings of each person, personality, motivations, etc.
I also love the inclusion of how the politics of higher powers, especially corrupt ones, affect those in the lower status.
It's really good!
Now for my honest review, or critiques;
As like any other non-fic inclusion to any plot, more so when it's heavily referenced, it's hard to keep up with the important details such as names, titles, places, and time. Especially when said history is not your own, it will be hard to keep up with;
now I'm not saying this to say that that's bad, there's only so much a person can add to explain each detail in creating something like this, the notes were helpful but definitely not enough. Not saying this to discourage anyone from reading, I honestly love this story and will continue reading, but just in case you don't like stories that needs you to pay attention to detail or be mindful for a block of information. . .
One of my actual critiques for this is the pacing for each character, or to say their appearances in each arc. You'll be introduced to a lot of characters who will spend some time with the mc, that'll make you think that they'll be there forever, but in a lot of points they will suddenly disappear without any explanation, and will continue on for a number of chapters, till they suddenly appear again. It's not that much of a problem, but it's definitely some sort of hole to the story's pacing and quality. It will feel a little random, and make you think whether this character or that is even relevant to the story still, since they possessed incredible growth or plot potential before suddenly disappearing.
Second critique or actually no, just a concern, is whether this has a romance twist in it. I'm well aware about the interest the women characters showed towards the mc, but what I'm concerned about is whether it'd be reciprocated. The mc is 35years old more or less, an estimate as he died when he was in his 30s and transmigrated when the body was 15years old or so, and he's now 20. So, if there is romance, I'm hoping that it'd be with someone not that far from his age.