Funny thing is, this is the type of story I would write.
Just, with a lot more plot, no weird thing where Teri keeps smacking the shit out of Jacques, I'd have the angst come in another way, I'd have Teri be a much more redeemable, far less sadistic dude. Definitely could have weird misunderstandings due to differences in culture between humans and devils, but it would have to be far more comedic... or at least, forward the plot in a different way.
I'd have Teri at least know the basics of 'consent,' ya know? Or, if not, then I'd at least have him not be such an ass. I'd have him not be so contemptuous towards humans. Like, Jacques apparently sacrificed himself for this man or something... yet this bitch is just bullying him. The fuck?
I'd also have them switch between who is bottoming + I'd make sure Jacques grows to be a little more powerful. Maybe as powerful as Teri. I'd have them develop some communication before any sex happens. I'd also make it so Teri bottoms first, personal preference, I like it when the more powerful character allows the less powerful one to take control. Then they'd start switching who bottoms a lot more.
The story is not the worst idea, it is just poorly executed. Lazily executed. Painfully executed. Traumatically executed. It hurt me. A lot. Lol...
Funny thing is, this is the type of story I would write.
Just, with a lot more plot, no weird thing where Teri keeps smacking the shit out of Jacques, I'd have the angst come in another way, I'd have Teri be a much more redeemable, far less sadistic dude. Definitely could have weird misunderstandings due to differences in culture between humans and devils, but it would have to be far more comedic... or at least, forward the plot in a different way.
I'd have Teri at least know the basics of 'consent,' ya know? Or, if not, then I'd at least have him not be such an ass. I'd have him not be so contemptuous towards humans. Like, Jacques apparently sacrificed himself for this man or something... yet this bitch is just bullying him. The fuck?
I'd also have them switch between who is bottoming + I'd make sure Jacques grows to be a little more powerful. Maybe as powerful as Teri. I'd have them develop some communication before any sex happens. I'd also make it so Teri bottoms first, personal preference, I like it when the more powerful character allows the less powerful one to take control. Then they'd start switching who bottoms a lot more.
The story is not the worst idea, it is just poorly executed. Lazily executed. Painfully executed. Traumatically executed. It hurt me. A lot. Lol...