you can’t force me to read like you force the fl to be part of the plot

vlanmoah July 16, 2024 8:31 am

i have a feeling that this is going to be a very dumb story with lots of “how convenient” plot turns for the fl. And it won’t be funny dumb, but rather annoying…
*SPOLER* but like not really, it’s literally all in the first few chapters
the fl is the “naive” (read as stupid af) type, doesn’t utilise her knowledge of the story and yet decides to jump in the very heart of it all. like for what? couldn’t you come up with anything else??? and why would the temple assign her (a commoner, and a freaking SINNER) as a tutor? to a cousin of the emperor none the less??? they have absolutely no reason to do it, she also doesn’t have the knowledge to be one, but oh well it’s needed for the plot. And when she comes, turns out the dumbo hasn’t thought even once(!) about the lessons, what to do and how, yet the little guy likes her more then the villain girlie, cause she encouraged him to eat a cake…
So far it feels VERY forced: the way she got there, the way she is portrayed to ba a poor commoner falling victim to a oh such a cruel noblewoman, the ~right things~ she says (and 100% will continue saying) to make others like her. Don’t expect her to resolve anything at all on her own, the ml will be the knight in shining armour, who saves the day

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    Amanozako November 10, 2024 8:32 pm

    What an accurate and thorough critique