could improve

goldnights June 10, 2024 6:23 am

this manhwa has potential but something is missing. it seems like there isn't enough talking for us to understand what's going on in their heads. I feel a distance from reader-character

Responses
    Yomama June 10, 2024 6:38 am

    I think what it is is that we are mostly getting the ML’s perspective and he’s not very expressive and pretty dull.

    mangoloco June 10, 2024 11:15 am

    i completely agree, but to reply to yomamas comment too, you can have a non expressive/ dull character and still write a good perspective, or at least have a 3rd person narrator to tell the story like its a book. the story has so much more potential if only the author knew to write more details... whenever I return to read a new chapter i dont remember anything that they have in common or what they talked about, it seems like their story is just "i was horny and fuck this guy when I get the chance" they dont really talk much

    Yomama June 10, 2024 5:44 pm
    i completely agree, but to reply to yomamas comment too, you can have a non expressive/ dull character and still write a good perspective, or at least have a 3rd person narrator to tell the story like its a boo... mangoloco

    Yea! I agree. I think the author is trying to make it seem like he only wants that from the Mc, but it’s just making the story dull. I’m also used to the perspective being the MC as well so it’s hard to flow into the story.

    jwooloml June 10, 2024 7:10 pm

    im ngl i think its mostly bc of the wonky translation. All the other stories from this author are genuinely great

    goldnights June 11, 2024 7:16 pm
    i completely agree, but to reply to yomamas comment too, you can have a non expressive/ dull character and still write a good perspective, or at least have a 3rd person narrator to tell the story like its a boo... mangoloco

    completely agree !!