The pacing... is off?

Lavender March 22, 2024 8:34 am

It may be just me, but it feels like any interesting or big problems or obstacles are resolved in two chapters, while the small, insignificant stuff lasts forever (most of the school issues seem irrelevant to the story).

For example, they constantly hint at the aunt and uncle being hostile but never directly address it and when an incident does occur it's solved almost instantaneously. (it feels dropped/forgotten and then picked up again at random times through the story)

In regards to the dad subplot, there hasn't been enough development up to this point, and then suddenly they have an argument and she blows up at him for one chapter. Only for them to not even follow up with anything other than him crying (like that was a huge emotional bomb dropped and we are just not going to acknowledge it??).

Going forward, my prediction is that they're going to gradually have him do things for her, to convince the audience that he's a 'good father', but it'll mostly be superficial stuff like helping her clean up (fix her hair, dab her mouth), or buying/winning her something. Additionally, the father will probably be hurt or nearly die, so the MC realizes that they really love and care about him (I call it forgiveness without the effort of redemption trope). There will be little to no communication until they are unable to avoid it (possibly when she cracks her mother's super-hard research and uses it publicly later).

I feel like a hater. However, there is just this feeling that the author keeps coming up with new ideas and subplots for the story, but forgets to include/maintain the existing subplots.

Responses
    Toji’s gf March 22, 2024 10:57 am

    No, don’t feel like a hater. It’s honestly very valid criticism and I 100% agree with you. Because it does feel like the author constantly added new subplot meanwhile completely forgetting the actual story and the already on going conflicts and subplots— it’s honestly kind of getting tiring and annoying to keep up with it all.

    Lavender March 22, 2024 10:52 pm
    No, don’t feel like a hater. It’s honestly very valid criticism and I 100% agree with you. Because it does feel like the author constantly added new subplot meanwhile completely forgetting the actual story ... Toji’s gf

    FR. I feel like they do the same thing with characters as well because they keep adding random characters/friend storylines and then we don't see the character for 10-20 chapters and when we finally do it's all of the characters at once ╥﹏╥

    They wrote 3 potential knights/bodyguards for the MC (yellow-haired guy, redhead guy, and black-haired girl), then completely scrapped them since her dad is acting as her bodyguard, and now they just randomly bring them all out at random points in the story, even when only one would suffice (which ngl it's funny that the yellow guy and redhead are ALWAYS a pair).