I HAVE THE SOLUTION TO FIX THIS!

Chiaki March 6, 2024 3:24 am

3 simple changes and this would easily be as successful as BJ Alex on here:

1) Instead of Dan being a lovesick, docile puppy, make him strong willed & hot blooded while still being cute around the one he loves, but he doesn't want to get treated bad and kinda argues back, teasing JK

2) Make JK less abusive, he can be a scary looking Top with an attitude but give him occasional sweetheart moments like blushing when Dan does something to provoke him and treating him somewhat special (not just as any other hole he gets to fuck for his jinx)

You can also include comedic moments and shift their dynamic from meek Dan x abusive JK to feisty Dan x annoyed but oddly fond of Dan JK
This would improve their interactions SO MUCH

3) Give them teasing moments, sexy snippets, not every intimate action needs to be all the way sex!!
I just read "2020" HIGHLY recommend, it's a 10/10 and does exactly this! They made out in front of the fridge (nipple play & kissing), Top fondled bottom while he was studying and stopped.
This would be spicy!! Develop their intimate interaction too!! Make it look like JK is into Dan while being dishonest at first and make Dan slightly hesitant but slowly falling for JK's antics

The rest can stay the same & this would easily be a 9-10/10!
Anyway just felt like writing this after reading 2020 just now, if you read that far, check out that Manhwa and come back....or don't, thanks for reading either way :)

Responses
    TheoEatsAss March 6, 2024 4:41 am

    Very much agree!
    Though personally I think an even easier fix for Dan is to make him less stupid. Like him liking JK after all that is just unrealistic?? I feel it should've been more Dan looking up to JK and appreciating JK's help to some degree, though not love, becuase no matter the small moments JK is nice he is overall abusive. The author made Dan too much of dumb naive bottom, to an unrealistic extent.

    Also, dude, I am going roll my back into the back of my skull if we get another BJ Alex ass "I have trauma.,..,.," excuse for his abuse. The author used it somewhat well in BJ Alex but it would not work here at all I feel.

    Chiaki March 6, 2024 6:07 am
    Very much agree!Though personally I think an even easier fix for Dan is to make him less stupid. Like him liking JK after all that is just unrealistic?? I feel it should've been more Dan looking up to JK and ap... TheoEatsAss

    YES 100% YES
    His undying love for JK is so sudden and weird, he is literally treated like a sex slave, what does he like about him exactly? He's never once seen ONE good side of JK (doing good without being for personal gain like him being annoyed at Dan's situation or wanting easier access to sex), what's there to love unless you have a degradee kink?
    I totally get the appreciation especially coming from Dan but the author stripped him of any actual personality, I do like him but he feels like early 2000's Yaoi Manga protagonist with the level of stupidity lol

    Yeah same, the abuse in this Manhwa is taken to the extreme and honestly I didn't really like BJ Alex all that much either...it's okay but the insane praise people seem to give it seems exaggerated, there's an abundance of better Manhwa out there. Maybe it's nostalgia for most? Idk ┑( ̄Д  ̄)┍

    TheoEatsAss March 6, 2024 7:02 am
    YES 100% YES His undying love for JK is so sudden and weird, he is literally treated like a sex slave, what does he like about him exactly? He's never once seen ONE good side of JK (doing good without being for... Chiaki

    DUDE YOU SO RIGHT I JUST REALIZED LMAO
    Made me realize that JK did totally only help him out to have easier sex I feel the only exception is when he was nice to Dan's grandma, maybe. Forgot so much of the plot honestly.
    JK got like no redeemable qualities lmaoo.

    I got like love hate relationship with BJ Alex, it's mid yeah but I go back and reread the like later parts cus it's cute (Alex buying the suger fish thing hehe)

    Chiaki March 6, 2024 7:14 am
    DUDE YOU SO RIGHT I JUST REALIZED LMAOMade me realize that JK did totally only help him out to have easier sex I feel the only exception is when he was nice to Dan's grandma, maybe. Forgot so much of the plot ... TheoEatsAss

    The plot is going in circles, no wonder you forgot lol
    The story is so stagnant and only focused on incident A leading to Dan abuse/sex, incident B leading to Dan abuse/sex....like wtf

    Yeah at least he has respect for the elderly, a shame Dan isn't elderly

    Vivid March 6, 2024 11:36 am

    LOVE THIS SM DEF CHECKING OUT 2020 NOW

    Lanlala March 6, 2024 4:22 pm

    Totally with you, this terrible plot is a waste of good art. (╯°Д °)╯╧╧

    Each update's a sad moment, at this point even good art loses its shine.
    Mingwa created a wonderful premise with Jinx, but didn't know how to develop it, she needs to learn from Crossing the Line author.

    btw you described the plot of Crossing the Line, the best manga in the Redemption category (in my humble opinion, if you know any other good plot tell me xD)

    https://www.mangago.zone/read-manga/crossing_the_line_1/

    Chiaki March 6, 2024 7:58 pm
    LOVE THIS SM DEF CHECKING OUT 2020 NOW Vivid

    Nice! Hope you like it :3

    Chiaki March 6, 2024 8:25 pm
    Totally with you, this terrible plot is a waste of good art. (╯°Д °)╯╧╧Each update's a sad moment, at this point even good art loses its shine.Mingwa created a wonderful premise with Jinx, but didn't... Lanlala

    Exactly!
    I feel like we're stuck in a loop, the story had so much potential!
    No twists and turns but the same spiel of Dan being accused and treated badly. Their interpersonal relationships hasn't developed at all which is a shame, we're almost 50 chapters in and it feels like barely anything happened.

    Crossing the Line is so good! The art is unique and the story has a nice flow. The biggest advantage over Jinx is that the Top is self aware and the Bottom has a backbone and doesn't just give in.

    (SPOILERS for anyone who hasn't read it!
    Like for example the confession we just got, Garam didn't just accept it because of their history, he thinks about it logically, even though he's moved by it, he refuses to be treated as a quick lay and was even aware of Yoon's feelings for him! Their interpersonal relationship is well developed and the conflict is clearly established. + you can see how Yoon has improved and grown to be more respectful of Garam).

    I think the redemption arc in Limited Run is nice since the Bottom doesn't forgive easily and accept the Top back in his life in order to protect his heart.
    But then again it's one of my favorite BL Manhwa of all time so I'm biased xD

    In general I hate when the MC just forgives the ML which we'll probably see in Jinx, I want to see proper growth and acknowledgement of the wrong doings which is the whole point of redemption but I fear Dan will just go with it once JK is a bit nicer someday.

    Manhwaspicy March 6, 2024 10:26 pm

    I feel like y'all need to realize this isn't a real romance. There's no romance tag in the off|cial site. It's about two characters facing trauma together and it's gonna take so fk long to progress. Toxicity at its finest.

    The plot is nice if you think about it. It's all revolving around his Jinx. But I totally agree with y'all.

    More polly sekes please March 7, 2024 8:44 pm

    Thanks I will check it out cause I definitely agree with your opinion about Jinx.

    Chiaki March 7, 2024 8:49 pm
    I feel like y'all need to realize this isn't a real romance. There's no romance tag in the off|cial site. It's about two characters facing trauma together and it's gonna take so fk long to progress. Toxicity at... Manhwaspicy

    I think I heard somewhere that Mingwa said this was a classical love story? Maybe I was misinformed ;_;

    But facing trauma together? I don't think it's written well in that regard, I can recommend "The Pizza Delivery Man and The Gold Palace" which actually deals with trauma and how two characters get together and help each other cope. Wonderful story!

    And I didn't get the feeling his Jinx was even mentioned much after the first few chapters, we know nothing about why he got it or his backstory.
    The premise is interesting and I'd love to see that aspect in more detail.
    For example in "Fucked by my best friend" where the MC gets turned into a girl for being a hopeless fuck boy, there's a lot of character growth but they still focus on searching for a way to return him to normal and finding the culprit.

    Sorry if this turned into an involuntary recommendation session ;_;

    Chiaki March 7, 2024 8:53 pm
    Thanks I will check it out cause I definitely agree with your opinion about Jinx. More polly sekes please

    Hope you like it :)

    Manhwaspicy March 8, 2024 12:14 am
    I think I heard somewhere that Mingwa said this was a classical love story? Maybe I was misinformed ;_; But facing trauma together? I don't think it's written well in that regard, I can recommend "The Pizza Del... Chiaki

    Thanks for the reply. I totally agree.

    The only thing mingwa said was they would end up together. She didn't promise us a lovely fluffy romance at all. She was quite specific at one of her events saying that Jk’s gonna be more toxic than Jiwon. What you heard was prob a rumor cause I follow up with her twitter. But anyway, I hope we read this to the end!♡

    Chiaki March 8, 2024 12:22 am
    Thanks for the reply. I totally agree. The only thing mingwa said was they would end up together. She didn't promise us a lovely fluffy romance at all. She was quite specific at one of her events saying that Jk... Manhwaspicy

    Oh I see! My bad then, thanks for clarifying that :D
    If her goal was to create a toxic Top then I guess she's succeeding? lol
    Yup now I'm in too deep anyways Dx
    Wishing us all some sanity