My critique

Banana November 17, 2023 3:53 am

Declaimer: i only read up to chapter 45

It's pretty... Hard to read? I have this inkling that the author wants to make a 'cool' seme, but it's off the mark for me. And kind of boring too, nlt because of the story, but idk, because of the art style. Ml said he needed someone to work with that is smart (mc is smart), collected (he's not, he kept on going itno outbursts), and knows his place (definitely he doesn't. The way mc kept on defying him and everything).

Also, mc's friend didn't even felt guilty about bringing that scumbag son of the CEO that almost killed mc. Because of his ',hero' nature, he forced mc to rescue those two (I'm happy too because at least they saved that girl).

I'm glad that at least the ml can be emotionally disturbed though, unlike those 'cool, cold' seme. But ngl, the romance between them is kinda forcedddd? Not really because I did feel something about their relationship, but the author probably didn't use or at least used the romance path well.

Also, I don't know if I missed it, but did ml even used mc even once? Besides from using him as his 'driver' or someone who injects his vaccine? I don't think I remember him using him. Like, come on, isn't that why you recruited him because he'll be somehow useful?


I'm reading this story for the revenge of ml to his father only. I want that old man to suffer.

Responses
    Akira November 17, 2023 4:29 pm

    I love the way you think bro esp the ml can be emotionally disturbed part