Now I Understand Why People Are Having A Hard Time Liking This...

AdinaAnime1900 October 23, 2023 12:59 am

Despite being a little confused, I came in liking the premise and the main character. But after getting 20 chapters in, I'm getting increasingly frustrated with the story's direction.

The Plot: I initially thought that the premise was the MC focused on improving herself and becoming self-sufficient after leaving the Orleans household because of the mistreatment she endured and only stayed to honor her mother who passed away. I thought this was what I should be expecting from the story (and there are many ways to make a story like this interesting). But then she moves into this mansion and now all of a sudden her previously proclaimed dead mother is actually missing and used to live in this specific mansion before disappearing (I'm only assuming this because the MC keeps finding things of hers in the house aka that picture of her in the book) and now the MC is on a manhunt to find her, completely shifting the story from the MC just trying to live a "modest life" to looking for a mother whose whereabouts (and reason for leaving) are unknown.

As for the characters: The MC switches from being distrustful of the man trespassing and threatening her in her own home to fully trusting him in a matter of just DAYS. This man is a tsundere and not in the traditional sense because he switches from threatening her to being the sweetest person she's ever met and the MC doesn't see how bizarre (or manipulative) that behavior is? Then there is the sudden introduction of her (ex) situationship that she apparently only hung around with because "why not". It doesn't really mention when (or why) she was with him and how her fiance fit into that timeframe. And if they weren't really anything (according to both of them), why is he so obsessed with her? Then there's the sudden (and random) introduction of the twin sister of the stepsister, Maggie. Why wasn't Maggie introduced with the family in the first damn chapter? And if the MC and Maggie were on good terms, why were we under the impression that she left because she had no one on her side when Maggie is clearly shown to be? Like a lot of people have pointed out the characters contradict themselves.

Let's not even begin to talk about the whole Wizard/mage to a Devil thing because that just makes me even madder to think about. And the fact that we find out that the main character has nullification to magic and aren't told how or why. She just states that she's "always been like that" but hasn't bothered to question that not once??

I just don't understand why the story is jumping in every direction while trying to stay consistent. It feels like the author is just thinking of new ideas and actually implementing them instead of having these rules previously established...

Responses
    gukkiecrumbs October 25, 2023 7:47 am

    you're so right literally took the words out of my mouth all of what you said I thought about like everything feels so random and weird and it's like they keep adding things along the way that should've been introduced from that start? and how her feelings change towards him and their relationship don't make sense at all this there's no logic

    Ren October 26, 2023 9:45 am
    you're so right literally took the words out of my mouth all of what you said I thought about like everything feels so random and weird and it's like they keep adding things along the way that should've been in... gukkiecrumbs

    Yea gives me the vibe on when i used to write on wattapad and just come up with stuff on the fly which ended with my character having the most random set of abilities and blood relations

    fwopfwop October 28, 2023 4:38 pm

    Lol author be really using mother as a plot device when the story gets so out of hand. And as for me, the thing that made me snap was when she made a contract with the devil TO FIND HER MOM (she was so passionate about it and it made me invested and hope that finally itll have a direction) and when it was finalized the first thing she want, the first and only wish she can get IS MONEY?! LIKE?!! When did she get money hungry?!