Y'know what, i have a problem with this.

Gone before turning 31 October 15, 2023 5:32 am

It lacks the very backbone of storytelling. The story is all over the place, the setting was not structured very well to leave a lasting impression other than that tigers place; what a waste. The school, the fl, the tiger, the boy, the younger siblings, even their lines and especially the narrating structure are poorly designed. The illustrations will be wasted if this continued. The characters lacks personalities especially their motivations too. Some char is okay like the pink haired girl. Her scene and lines are good for their scene together, her actions are better conveyed aside from the main character...Rawr! The fact that the author added some younger siblings, fl should have a grounded personality with them, she was seen as what? Her hardworking was not given a large amount of time, theres so much potential there. Its too short.. The world-building is too fast! The tiger was introduced fast! Author shouldve narrate the very backbone of fl to make her much appealing and relatable...now, when reading shes like, JUST a character with no potential to grow...everything is gloomy, if you want your main character to stand out and be loved, give them some idealistic qualities. This Fl has nothing to offer. Im beginning to think that the author wants to end this fast. Still at chapter 13 but already at the peak of conflict. Too many ideas and elements running here..should introduce them slowly to have a lasting impression to readers...might drop this, im just here because of the cute tiger, kinda sad that the art is being wasted like this...kinda nonesense with the rescue scene..hmm, anyway, were just blinded by the cute tiger.

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