Story Telling issues

Consenting Seme September 13, 2023 9:08 pm

The writer omits to give enough exposure on the characters, the setting, and just overall enough details on the plot for me to care about the MC's struggles and comprehend the plot. They took show don't tell too literally. Here, we know she wants to prevent her upcoming execution but the sovieshit fiancé already broke off the engagement, so why didn't she just ran away? She said she doesn't want revenge so just go? She's clearly loaded she can just take off...

Responses
    SatisfiedCorn September 14, 2023 3:41 am

    There are reasons, it's just that the translation is bad so u might not understand. Also, the fiance said he breaks it off, but he didnt do anything in that regard. Mc sill still have to be the one to break it herself, because that guy was just bluffing.

    Consenting Seme September 14, 2023 7:03 pm
    There are reasons, it's just that the translation is bad so u might not understand. Also, the fiance said he breaks it off, but he didnt do anything in that regard. Mc sill still have to be the one to break it ... SatisfiedCorn

    Yeah I saw someone explain the storyline earlier but that doesn't change the fact there's a lack of characterisation and an incoherent pacing so even though the translation is bad, I can understand why it'd be hard for a scanlation group to properly translate a story that is missing much needed exposure.