The idea is good. But we only see Fujimiya's point of view on the main couple and you can't help but side with him and as a result the story with Yoshida just felt meh. Like a runner up consolation prize. Maybe with a chapter focused on the main couple with the point of view set in either Yuki or the uke and then the other chapters focused on Fujimiya and a little bit more development on the story between Fujimiya and Yoshida. How he developed their feelings and how Fujimiya got over the uke from the other story. As it is, ia hard to connect with the characters and so the story goes to waste.
The idea is good. But we only see Fujimiya's point of view on the main couple and you can't help but side with him and as a result the story with Yoshida just felt meh. Like a runner up consolation prize.
Maybe with a chapter focused on the main couple with the point of view set in either Yuki or the uke and then the other chapters focused on Fujimiya and a little bit more development on the story between Fujimiya and Yoshida. How he developed their feelings and how Fujimiya got over the uke from the other story.
As it is, ia hard to connect with the characters and so the story goes to waste.