It's very cute, and I usually love stories with around 20 chapters, but this is one of those stories that needed more chapters to develop the plot. I read in a previous reply that this was for a school project, but if given the chance, this would have been amazing as a 30-50 chapter story. Like we never saw Chess during the first few days of moving in (ngl I was low-key confused if he did move in at first), and how it affected both Ben and Chess. Also, all we ever saw was Ben push Chess away. We never really saw them develop actual feelings towards each other. Like it would have been cute if we saw them eating meals together or watching TV, just to show them actually spending time together. I felt like they were never around each other, and the few times they were, Ben was telling him to leave him be. Anyways, my overall point is that I wish this was longer and a bit more developed because it was very cute, but a bit too short,
It's very cute, and I usually love stories with around 20 chapters, but this is one of those stories that needed more chapters to develop the plot. I read in a previous reply that this was for a school project, but if given the chance, this would have been amazing as a 30-50 chapter story. Like we never saw Chess during the first few days of moving in (ngl I was low-key confused if he did move in at first), and how it affected both Ben and Chess. Also, all we ever saw was Ben push Chess away. We never really saw them develop actual feelings towards each other. Like it would have been cute if we saw them eating meals together or watching TV, just to show them actually spending time together. I felt like they were never around each other, and the few times they were, Ben was telling him to leave him be. Anyways, my overall point is that I wish this was longer and a bit more developed because it was very cute, but a bit too short,