I made quite some typos due to writing via phone but I think it's still understandable
Thank you for turning this into an effing class. Bye Felicia!!!
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This cosmic dance of bursting decadence and withheld permissions twists all our arms collectively, but, if sweetness can win, and it can, then i'll be here tomorrow to high five you yesterday, my friend. peace. See? i can sound deep and smart too!
Lemme critique your criticism; unorganized, meandering, incomprehensible and pedantic.
I'm surely seeing all these positive comments but as an artist and comic creator I cannot stay silent, this comic got amateur mistakes from the start, making it really difficult to follow in the most basic stuff like presenting characters and the situation itself, following poorly how an storyline should be done. It gets too dense just out of the blue and many things stay unclear, as far as also multiple mistakes in the position of the dialogues between characters and the ways to present them. Also the characters themselves are too stereotypical, and the storyline gets a ridiculous plot twist that makes me think the author didn't think much about how to tie the knots and just wanted it "to look cool"
I'm sorry but it was too boring to read, the rhythm of the storyline was messy and most of the time slow and the structure of the comic didn't help much about it, I found myself rolling eyes over and over and when I reached chapter 4 I just skipped half of the dialogues each page without any problems, because ma st of them where just empty narration to exaggerate the characters and the situation.
Also, these are minor issues compared to the other a but the study for ambiance and location was also poor, too Japanese to be focused on occidental culture, I can more or less understand that from a Japanese author as most find difficult to really picture occidental cultures and you can't help putting some of you (and your culture( in what you do, but trying as this was, to be a "serious" comic I find the lack of research dissapointing too.
I'm getting lazy so I'll leave it at that, also I don't think I need to point everything since I don't have the strength to re-read and analyse such a thing xDU I might get ahit about this post but needed to be said and it's my opinion, posted with objective information and analysis. So I'll leave it here.