Soooooo much filler

TachibanaChiharu June 14, 2021 5:15 am

I did my best to try and finish this story but the most I could manage to complete was up through chapter 11. This entire thing can be summed up by a combination of these two idioms: spinning your wheels, and empty calories.

The biggest problem is that this story has atrocious pacing. There are so many pointless filler scenes, and so many unrelated and unneeded dialog bubbles just loaded with text all over every panel that it takes 4 times longer to read this story than other much "longer" stories. Comics are a visual medium; use art and character expressions to convey meaning rather than giant blocks of text. Anyway, point is, it drags so badly because of all this filler that I just couldn't force my way through it and gave up after completing chapter 11.

The unfortunate part is that I didn't really dislike the story or the characters and their dynamics (well, Azuma wasn't great, but he's better than some I've read), as well as the world the author was trying to build. It just wasn't really woven together in a satisfying/engaging way, and my eyes were constantly straying to the scrollbar to see how close I was to the end of the chapter. Not good.

Some suggestions on how this could be improved. Cut some of the side characters, reduce the random side-vignettes, make side characters more compelling with budding romances of their own, cut down on the dialog and find a way to condense it into shorter sentences and fewer bubbles, drop the random dialog from background characters, use art to convey meaning instead of text, cut down on the old shoujo cliches, give Azuma real problems instead of made-up-in-his-own-head problems, have the two leads circle each other more rather than making it seem totally one-sided from Takayama's perspective.

I may try to come back and finish this someday. I really did want to finish it. Ah well; we'll see.

Responses
    fikka(フィッカ) June 30, 2021 2:04 pm

    It's okay I feel you.. tho I did finish the whole manga.. and of course ny skipping all the fillers.. tho and yeah.. I feel wasted and tbh I would say Jou is real tough uke I ever seen and watched.. and I'm still pissed off with Azuma half-ass feelings.. it's not half-ass but for me it's half-ass effort.. Azuma still irritated me till the end of this manga.. And yeah.. I'm gonna take some rest reading shit and playing genshin causs I feel super wasted reading this manga in one whole day non-stop with half-ass ending. Like seriously.. I feel wasted and regret reading this shit.. ಡ ʖ ಡ

    Son Minji January 25, 2024 6:42 pm

    I feel you. I loved the art and the the orange haired protagonist, but the story and dialogues were shallow and empty. The author tried to make it deep but failed. The manga had a lot of potential if the author used meaningful conversation instead of empty words

    Then January 26, 2024 12:49 pm
    I feel you. I loved the art and the the orange haired protagonist, but the story and dialogues were shallow and empty. The author tried to make it deep but failed. The manga had a lot of potential if the autho... Son Minji

    Deymnnn what is this manga about.. It's been years and low-key make me curious but reading my own comment makes me rethinking my decision.

    Son Minji January 26, 2024 2:09 pm
    Deymnnn what is this manga about.. It's been years and low-key make me curious but reading my own comment makes me rethinking my decision. Then

    Haha, I didn't read the date of your comment x)
    I still read the manga and finished despite the incoherent passages