Hello, I'm thinking of creating a manga styled comic. The genres of this particular story ...

HarukisCorner May 25, 2021 1:05 am

Hello, I'm thinking of creating a manga styled comic. The genres of this particular story is: Horror, Thriller, Crime, Psychological, Tragedy, Yaoi, and drama.

I have posted (well tried to let's see if they actually show up)- The character designs in my album. If you could give me feedback on this story and the art that'll be a huge help to me.

Story plot (rough idea):

It’s a story from the “ukes” perspective. The “ukes” name is Aoi and he’s an idol. He’s very innocent looking and is rising in fame. He’s known to be the angel of the group he’s in. He’s got a very outgoing and cheerful personality. No one knows about his backstory or where he came from, he got recruited when someone took a video of him singing in an underground subway tunnel. His video blew up because of his angelic voice and his beautiful appearance.

Unbenounced to everyone is that Aoi is a serial killer that takes pleasure in seeing people being disenchanted by him. Aoi has a messed up backstory, so he finds pleasure killing people who idolize him. I won’t get into the backstory bc there’s a lot to cover. The backstory doesn't excuse his actions, however it gives you a better understanding of the character. Aoi kills people of any age, gender, sexuality, race, etc.

Aoi has been killing people since he was 17 (he’s now 21).Aoi was scrolling through fans comments and found one about an occult that summons demons. Not really believing it, but still wanting to try out the horrific sacrifice methods, Aoi decides to have some fun and go along with the cults "ridiculous summons". Aoi decides to go to the cults meeting place. On the outside it looked like a club, however in the far back in the basement was the cults "hangout", of course Aoi used an allies and covered himeself up but no body seemed to care anyways. To Aoi's surprise those summons were actually legitimate. A demon (seme number 1) appears before Aoi with a deal that Aoi is to supply the demon with victims (aka his food) so that Aoi himself doesn't become food.

The demon and Aoi sign a contract that basically allows Aoi to get the help of the demon using his powers and in exchange giving the demon food. The contract ends when Aoi dies or cant keep up his end of the deal.

Aoi keeps a steady number of people he kills but recently he starts to decrease the amount of people he’s killing which now throws the demons hunger off. (A lot of people asked me why he stopped. It's not deep he just started to get busy with his work that he had to slow down)

The demon warns Aoi that if he doesn’t start killing more people Aoi will be the next victim. Aoi starts committing more murders, but since he’s rushing them he starts to slip up. Aoi, the idol who’s never had a rumour or scandal, the idol everyone loves and adores, starts to be suspected for recent murders. Dun Dun Duuuunnn

I have a way that he’ll get out of it but his reputation gets ruined big time. That’s just the beginning of the plot, there's a lot more. The second seme I haven't given much thought yet, he'll be a mix of bad and good though. He's not on Aoi's side but he's also not against him.

I’m thinking this won’t have a happy ending, just that Aoi is literally the worst human ever. This story wont have rape because I hate that and its stressful to draw. Aoi is a power bottom, and this isn't a love triangle.

What I'm hoping to accomplish is making a suspenseful story that shows a character slowly going insane.

Please, please give me feedback. Ideas to add to the plot, constructive criticism, even if this story somewhat Interests you. Thank you for reading this. :)

Responses
    Parkrr May 25, 2021 1:15 am

    I checked out your album and I have to say you’re really talented!! I love the plot and the art! When you do get the story up and running don’t forget to tell me I’d love to read the final product (●'◡'●)ノ

    Yumemi May 25, 2021 1:15 am

    Wait this is really good

    yelly May 25, 2021 1:27 am

    THIS SOUNDS SO INTERESTING OMG

    Lune May 25, 2021 1:32 am

    Hey question, I saw something like this yesterday about a boy named Aoi, I gave some advice about a certain part of the story draft. It was on a different account that is now deleted? Yea sorry to ruin the vibe but is uh this really copy and pasted? Form the mangago user : Mangawriter_56 idk that thread is deleted now so I have no proof but just someone another mangago user pointed this out first the day before the post was deleted (=・ω・=)

    Lunniie May 25, 2021 1:35 am

    I'd love to read it, consider me one of your followers ,(๑•ㅂ•)و✧

    icy May 25, 2021 1:44 am

    damn i'm actually really interested in this! i'll gladly give you my money for this

    HarukisCorner May 25, 2021 1:51 am
    Hey question, I saw something like this yesterday about a boy named Aoi, I gave some advice about a certain part of the story draft. It was on a different account that is now deleted? Yea sorry to ruin the vibe... Lune

    That was my old account hahaha. I thought this account was broken so I made that one but since this one works now I deleted the other one. :)

    HarukisCorner May 25, 2021 1:52 am
    Hey question, I saw something like this yesterday about a boy named Aoi, I gave some advice about a certain part of the story draft. It was on a different account that is now deleted? Yea sorry to ruin the vibe... Lune

    I actually deleted the user so that account is gone now I believe..

    HarukisCorner May 25, 2021 2:34 am
    https://www.mangago.me/home/mangatopic/12519297/caught in 4k? BELL

    No. that person took my story then made that comment when I confronted them in-case they got back lash. :/