Hold my shit bro holy crap I checked ur album and it looks amazing. Once it's corrected and not just rough drafts that shit is gonna look fucking BOMB. The story also sounds mad interesting. If you get famous one day don't forget me
That's amazing
plot is great, art is amazing hope you’re famous soon
the face of the second seme and aoi is pretty similar though, maybe you can change some features so some people can differentiate them but overall your art is really good :)
Sounds cool
omlll this looks and sounds so good !! itll defo become a fave
idk why but I feel like the 2nd seme would just be playing (but still in a loving way?) Aoi while he slowly goes into madness because he couldn't go back on the 1st seme for some reason anyways this story sounds very interesting I would love to see it go into action <3
THE PLOT IS GOOD I FEEL LIKE YOU'LL DO GREAT. And I'm also really glad you won't put rape scenes cuz to me it's really off putting and I also like how the uke won't be like those annoying ones which is really refreshing since you don't see a lot of power bottoms and as for the second seme he gives me a lot of detective vibes (⌒▽⌒)
WOAHH YOUR ART STYLE IS SO BEAUTIFUL!! do you have any socials by any chance?? i would love to follow and support your art!!
this plot seems really good too!!
Aww thank you! I as of right now don't have a social media account for my art. I have a personal instagram and facebook though.
When I upload the comic I'll also make an account just for the comic/my art. I'll let you know when I create the account!!
Thank you T>T
I agree with you about the second seme. ;)
That's exactly what the second seme would do haha. Thank you for your support <3
Yay I'm so glad!!
Yes, I agree. It's a work in progress T.T
I'm glad you think so! Thanks for the support <3
Aw, you make me blush. Thank you for the support <3
Thank you!! That means a lot to me.. I don't really know how to put my appreciation in words. <3
I looked at your character designs, and holy shit. They are so good. That artstyle completely fits the bleak story that you have in mind.
This kind of plot is my absolute favorite - rather than a happy ending, I want to experience a main character slowly fall into insanity, disappointing their loved ones in the process. A happy ending is not realistic. A realistic ending, in turn, is refreshing.
When I read this plot, a few ideas come to mind. First, I think the story will include hidden meanings. Not only about the character, but also about life in general - something that we, the readers, can consider in our everyday lives. That is why I think it's important that you determine the main themes that this story will revolve around. What is the final, most impactful message that the story will deliver to the readers?
Overall, I would definitely read this story. If executed well, many others will too. :D
Thank you! What you explained is the overall goal.
I really loved 'killing stalking' and 'death note'. I like that both stories made develop empathy for these horrible characters. I also like the way they made you think, if Sangwoos mother wasn't horrible would he be different? If Light didn't pick up the death note what would've happened?
Death note is really what I'm going off of for the plot, the people in society started agreeing, even worshiping "Kira" and I find that fascinating. I want to emulate that with my story.
I'm actually in university for criminology so these kinda of stories I find are most interesting.
Hello, I'm thinking of creating a manga styled comic. The genres of this particular story is: Horror, Thriller, Crime, Psychological, Tragedy, Yaoi, and drama.
I have posted (well tried to let's see if they actually show up)- The character designs in my album. If you could give me feedback on this story and the art that'll be a huge help to me.
Story plot (rough idea):
It’s a story from the “ukes” perspective. The “ukes” name is Aoi and he’s an idol. He’s very innocent looking and is world wide famous. He’s known to be the angel of the group he’s in. He’s got a very outgoing and cheerful personality. No one knows about his backstory or where he came from, he got recruited when someone took a video of him singing in an underground subway tunnel. His video blew up because of his angelic voice and his beautiful appearance.
Unbenounced to everyone is that Aoi is a serial killer that takes pleasure in seeing people being disenchanted by him. Aoi has a messed up backstory, so he finds pleasure killing people who idolize him. I won’t get into the backstory bc there’s a lot to cover. The backstory doesn't excuse his actions, however it gives you a better understanding of the character. Aoi kills people of any age, gender, sexuality, race, etc.
Aoi has been killing people since he was 17 (he’s now 21). Aoi starts to find his way of killing to be boring so while he was browsing the web he "coincidentally" comes across a cult that summons demons. Not really believing it, but still wanting to try out the horrific sacrifice methods, Aoi decides to have some fun and go along with the cults "ridiculous summons". To Aois surprise those summons were actually legitimate. A demon (seme number 1) appears before Aoi with a deal that Aoi is to supply the demon with victims (aka his food) so that Aoi himself doesn't become food.
(This has changed. Aoi joins the cult, some things happen there that I won’t get into on this comment. The rest about the demon pretty much stayed the same it changed a little though.)
The demon and Aoi sign a contract that basically allows Aoi to get the help of the demon using his powers and in exchange giving the demon food. The contract ends when Aoi dies or cant keep up his end of the deal. if all goes well when Aoi dies he'll be judged by the demon lord and either gets to become a demon or goes back to earth. If Aoi is eaten by the demon his soul is stuck in never ending torture and nothingness. (I haven't really thought too much about the contracts details tbh)
Aoi keeps a steady number of people he kills but recently he starts to decrease the amount of people he’s killing which now throws the demons hunger off.
The demon warns Aoi that if he doesn’t start killing more people Aoi will be the next victim. Aoi starts committing more murders, but since he’s rushing them he starts to slip up. Aoi, the idol who’s never had a rumour or scandal, the idol everyone loves and adores, starts to be suspected for recent murders. Dun Dun Duuuunnn
I have a way that he’ll get out of it but his reputation gets ruined big time. That’s just the beginning of the plot, there's a lot more. The second seme I haven't given much thought yet, he'll be a mix of bad and good though. He's not on Aoi's side but he's also not against him.
I’m thinking this won’t have a happy ending, just that Aoi is literally the worst human ever. This story wont have rape because I hate that and its stressful to draw. Aoi is a power bottom, and this isn't a love triangle.
What I'm hoping to accomplish is making a suspenseful story that shows a character slowly going insane.
Please, please give me feedback. Ideas to add to the plot, constructive criticism, even if this story somewhat Interests you. Thank you for reading this. :)