kinda sparsed or directionless

moody_bish May 15, 2021 4:05 pm

too many subplots which makes it seem directionless... like, it started with helping the poor land develop thru her knowledge from her past life which could have been the central point but the execution didn't complement it. the sudden introduction to magic and her secret skills, the info about the true identity of her family which is so sparsed or revealed in awkward intervals because of the coffee entrepreneurship, the kidnapping, the distant relatives, the epidemic...

there's no clear organization to the sequences that's why it feels so random. especially the way she throws in her modern knowledge and the delayed information from her parents... and the ending is somehow lacking because there's no clear climax as well. it just went from 'youre just a poor noble' but wait 'you' re actually an OP' but WAIT "you're just human!'

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